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It's Blue I See, I See
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It's Blue I See, I See |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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It's Blue I See, I See blue cradled me, it's cooling curve, it's fingertips playing, crawling towards your heaven, sent songs, loud and turning, blue whispered me, wine's last breath and cycled up establishments that set the boundries down, in bone, it was not your turn, it wasn't on blue, it was not an option for you in my world, in the streets of pigeoned walk, in littered shells and old time talks, it was not a choice to choose, it wasn't for your recreation, or your free you see, blue walks by sides in times and you can feel the wind pick up in the hollowness of your frame, your name again? I'm the same you see, it was you that fell this time not me, when my rib bones rattle and the floors begin to spin, run still I say, run still, blue rings and stabs and laughs and sings, she sings to me of fruited earth and flowered sky and everlasting sun, she runs sometimes, she runs, it's blue today in jars of life, in glass bead strings of time, it's blue I see, it sets me free,... it's blue I see, I see. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Spitfire, now do one for me in green... a lot of images here... quote: Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Lovely Spitfire! The flow in this was exceptionally smooth, I really enjoyed this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ This is an absolutely capitvating piece of work. I'm intrigued with the images I see as I turn it around and around ... prismed shades of blue in every facet ... 'blue rings and stabs and laughs and sings, she sings to me of fruited earth and flowered sky and everlasting sun, she runs sometimes, she runs, it's blue today in jars of life, in glass bead strings of time, it's blue I see, it sets me free,... it's blue I see, I see.' WOW ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Spit Fire--Wonderfully done...I love the way you write! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is stunning, Spitfire...the first line is a fabulous draw...and it just gets better after that...but I do love, "blue cradled me..." and then the following, "blue whispered me..." sighs... because it does. Just awesome, lady. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Which line did I like best? Well, I honestly tried to find one but the whole thing just fits so PERFECTLY that I didn't want to seperate the shades of "blue", so I would have to say that all of them are as represented below. blue cradled me, it's cooling curve, it's fingertips playing, crawling towards your heaven, sent songs, loud and turning, blue whispered me, wine's last breath and cycled up establishments that set the boundries down, in bone, it was not your turn, it wasn't on blue, it was not an option for you in my world, in the streets of pigeoned walk, in littered shells and old time talks, it was not a choice to choose, it wasn't for your recreation, or your free you see, blue walks by sides in times and you can feel the wind pick up in the hollowness of your frame, your name again? I'm the same you see, it was you that fell this time not me, when my rib bones rattle and the floors begin to spin, run still I say, run still, blue rings and stabs and laughs and sings, she sings to me of fruited earth and flowered sky and everlasting sun, she runs sometimes, she runs, it's blue today in jars of life, in glass bead strings of time, it's blue I see, it sets me free,... it's blue I see, I see. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Spits~ Wonderful imagery and one to make you think...enjoyed the read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sunshine, green? I'd love to give that a shot. Thank you for reading my words. ~Kit, thank you kindly for stopping in and for the lovely reply. ~Margie, thank you thank you for the wow and all of your sweet words. ~Martie, I love the way YOU write! Thank you ever so much. ~Serenity, you are much too kind. It does do that huh? Glad you were aware. Thank you for visiting me. ~Mark, that is such a cool reply. Thank you thank you! ~Tracie, thank you for stopping in and reading and for leaving me with your kind words. *Peace all. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Loved it a lot |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
SPITFIRE, hmmmmmmm... There's not much more that can be said about this poem other than what our friends above have already expressed... My compliments to you for this spectacular write, honestly though the reply from our friend Marge says it all...  Coco |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fire, feeling a little blue are you? Well don't worry a rainbow of praise is coming your way. she paints blue shades of desire the colour of her heart the orange gold of her fire her finest way to start and colours of earth and sky are always in her write with yellowing echoing on high with grey for claiming night her poetry all abounds in colours seen and heard all I can do is stand, say "Zounds" in envy I could not say a word. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Back to one word Spitfire...like it or not; A M A Z I N G !! jwesley |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i like everyone else loved it..loved the images you created spitfire.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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