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Roller Coaster Farewell.............reposted
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I'm tired of those tumultuous rides That shake and rattle my insides And make my heart stick in my throat Like pain without an antidote Portraying love that can't be found..... The roller coaster's closing down. No more to sit upon that seat And watch the world beneath my feet Spin uncontrolled before my eyes As I am held in rapt surprise While being lifted off the ground..... The roller coaster's closing down. There was a time I loved the thrill Of being carried up the hill, A skyward trip toward Heaven's door With promised happiness in store But, each time that I neared the top, There came an unexpected drop - - - Which tore apart my very soul As I spun down without control Toward the earth to crash once more As all my hopes had done before To leave my sanity unwound..... The roller coaster's closing down. So speak to me no more of love Or thoughts to raise my head above The clouds in false expectancy Of things that are not meant for me. I'll settle for a merry-go-round..... The roller coaster's closing down. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
The Merry Go Round is much better....if you grab the brass ring  "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i closed it down a few weeks ago haa. just trying to find the funhouse now  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I rode the roller coaster a time or two and decided that it was not for me. Give me the merry-go-round I always know it will go round and can see who is riding with me. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh... Yup. No more to sit upon that seat And watch the world beneath my feet Spin uncontrolled before my eyes As I am held in rapt surprise While being lifted off the ground..... The roller coaster's closing down. I understand this one all right 'deer! I like the tone you've used here...it suits the theme. Fine write my friend... KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i once went to the county fair and found the rides they had out there - while looking for a thrill or two, i got upon a ride with you. and there i was, just spinning 'round, my feet no longer on the ground, a roller coaster ride, it was, it felt as if i'd caught a buzz! my head was flying off my neck and i just thought, "aw what the heck!? why not continue on this ride?" but pretty soon, my heart just sighed because i couldn't stop the thing! electric bells began to zing my insides were all zapped inside! my god, it was a real FINE ride!  well, so it was. but that was then. so, let's get on that ride again???  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rose...I do agree...that brass ring is very important  Victoria...the fun house! I never thought of that! Let me know when you find it! inot2B....those are very important points!! Kamla...I know you do..change rides and everything will be fine |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
balladeer you got rings of brass go grab em great job bo likes it lots |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
I left my heart and my stomach at the last one. Glad you picked a merry go round..I'm still trapped in the bumper cars. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks ya got lots a rides left in ya cant wait to see your reply to Dor... we all better take our motion pills now later-ride-with-ya-anytime-gator jm |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Balladeer-This was one of my favorites when I first read it and it still is now. Penned to perfection. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Time to graduate down to the merry-go-round where life is under control and you probably won't lose your watch, wallet, dentures etc. I think this is a great fun poem I enjoyed the delivery.....thanks for sharing Balladeer |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Michael! What a wonderful way to describe the ups and down and twists and turns of life and love. Now me? I'm a ride fanatic ... give me the highest and the fastest, with the biggest G-Force you can muster. I even bungie jumped off a tower crane a few years back, and loved every second of it! Great writing Michael, you're ideas never cease to amaze me, loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ If the merry-go-round of life spun around and dropped me in your playground ... I'd want to play forever ! You are quite the poet, sir. Your originality is refreshing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Here is wonderful writing, Friend. One thing...Wouldn't the merry-go-round eventually make you just as sick or dizzy? |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I remember this one! Fantastic writing, Balladeer! The tempo actually gives one that roller coaster feeling! Denise |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
this just had to make another round back up the coaster to the top...that thrill of falling, whether good or bad...can't be stopped... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey 'deer...maybe you should try the swings...still that breathless up in the air feeling of flight...but none of the scary drops...cmon I'll swing with you Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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