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Excuse me, May I borrow me back?
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Excuse me, May I borrow me back? |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Excuse me, May I borrow me back? I think it is time to borrow myself back from a place I didn't go with a resolve I lacked and now is the time to get myself into place while I stretch out to beat my own race… may I borrow me back? for a little while? I need to see again if that is indeed my smile, if that is my hair that I cut myself and I need to borrow my perfume there from off my shelf… it's time for me now to face an enterprise and if it could be the starship it would not disguise a bit of queer sensation that's been given to rise ever since I found this black hole that's been a huge surprise… I reckon it's that "crisis" that faces everyone the time to decide for good or bad if we're having any fun a year ago I thought quite keen a warp that I was in and relegated just myself to burrow deep in den and keep myself from thinkin' but you've been there… tinkerin'… and now my mind is brewing to percolate it does and just because there are elephants in the room doesn't mean it was time for me to stop thinking or time for me to quit so my mind will continue this racing life's quest even though I sit. So I'm going to borrow me again from the me that was and I'm not going to forget to stop and give me pause… nor will I ever stop from the moments of remember just because with life again I'm going to become a full fledged member…. so there I shall see you long on down the road and I will hear again that aged old rooster in this life give a good crow… for there are many stories still left here in me and I think I've just about begun to climb up the family tree… and whether silly, or sincere the message you will read shall be here… as will the deed… whether winsome or sparkling treasured or withered… know that if you hear it from me most likely all sources of claim will be dithered…. < !signature--> Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-12-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
~Sunshine~ I LOVED THIS ONE!! EXCELLENT !  ~SEA~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, THIS IS WONDERFUL, I know I'm shouting, but I had to because otherwise you wouldn't hear me over the noise the crowd is making. Love this one Kari, it's utterly excellant. Very well written as always a really great poem. Take care Majestic Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
winsome. . . sparkling. . . sincere. . . I really like it. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
"borrow myself back from a place I didn't go"..from those words on, Karilea, I was completely captivated by this poem. Do you have any idea how good this poem really is??? I've read it five times and I may go back for another few. You say so much here and the meaning is so clear...the way you have come up with to make points leaves me here smiling and shaking my head. This is one brilliant piece of writing. I am not just giving a flowery response..I mean it sincerely. This is great writing, Karilea. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is so very....YOU...I loved the thoughts in it and the message in your words..You weave like no one else can and I always walk away wondering..."how does she do that!"...great writing!! |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I can only say, me too, me too!!! So great I cannot formulate the right words to express exactly how powerfully the message arrowed straight to my soul!!! Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and these are the voyages Beam me up, Scotty!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Kari (if I may lol) - I must agree with 'deer here... I am bookmarking this for further readings...this is full of imagery and concepts I want to sink my teeth into. Tres magnificent! (Is that right? Did that on a whim...hehe) Hugs Little K < !signature--> The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-13-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think it is time to borrow myself back from a place I didn't go with a resolve I lacked and now is the time to get myself into place while I stretch out to beat my own race… may I borrow me back? for a little while? ================ for there are many stories still left here in me and I think I've just about begun to climb up the family tree… and whether silly, or sincere the message you will read shall be here… as will the deed… whether winsome or sparkling treasured or withered… know that if you hear it from me most likely all sources of claim will be dithered…. ================= and there are MANY poems left in you still as well ... those first 2 verses say it all .. The old Genesis song comes to mind .."Giving it all away" it sure starts to feel this way after awhile dont it .. please allow me to ditto Balladeers perfect reply ... this is excellent writing Sun, powerful emotive display of poetry. related more than I care to admit...ya know? ... yes ...you know. take care jm |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
oops...was that me? Where's the mirror... SEA...thank you!... Marsha, no need to shout, not a crowd here, just kind friends...well, unless you count the Sybils in my soul, then it could be a little crowded... Sven, winsome is such a cute word... 'Deer...I'm learning, I'm learning...and I always take your words to heart, and know when you are sincere, and when you jest, and the difference that lies thereintween...and thanks for the "great"... BDC, that is the level for which I am striving..."how does she do it"...to which I have applied to so many fine poets here... Peppermint, that my arrow pierced your heart is indeed another fine compliment, thank you... Nan, you've got me beaming, all righty... Little K...LOL at you...you are tres magnifique yourself... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
and I willingly disappear to become a little being numbed by the might of the pen you wield... Ah! How your writings mesmerise my chain of thoughts... Way too wonderful work, Karilea... Regards, Sudhir |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sunshine ~ My prayer is that when you borrow yourself you will become very selfish, an indian giver, and keep you to share with us! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, don't you dare disappear...we just got you back!...{~,^}...thank you!... Interloper, be careful of what you pray for...some prayers have a way of coming about...{~,^}...thank you!!!< !signature--> Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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