Open Poetry #10 |
The Great Magician |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
The Magician asked for a volunteer From all of us watching in the sea Really He knew I was waiting here And from the beginning His eyes on me Swallowing my fears I charged the stairs The Great Magician unveiling his plan As I looked upon the device with care I was not upbeat as when I'd began Doubts were swirling like the smoke surrounding Then a box was rolled to the staging floor At this frightful site my heart was pounding And my eyes were trained on the exit door Then I felt promise wash my body clean And the box was sealed with my soul inside The crowd was hush and not a doubter seen Soon after that I was taking my bride Smoke swirling we jumped clear of the box It was now us but my soul was fulfilled I’d busted the chains and broken the locks And thanked God the Magician, His will. [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-12-2000).] |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Outstanding imagery! You carry the reader along wonderfully with this. Nice job! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Got to admire those magicians hey Walty. Loved the poem, great imagery my friend Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Walt, Wonderful imagery. At first I wasn't sure where the verse would go, but you've created such as stunning ending that brings every line together. A lovely read, thank you. love, da punk |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys yuh i got an earache ooooo |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Walt, you get better and better all the time... I'm impressed, I am... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx nanners your sincere replies mean so much to me yuh |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Way, Well done, the magic of your words into poetry is quite remarkable. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Muchly enjoyed the imagery here. Nicely written. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Ed |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I love this, Walt. I don't even have any words for how much! |
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