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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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I FEEL YOU... i feel you on my skin tingling hot breath on my pores you warm me seizing me with your entity i feel you on my hands i reach for you... tenderly you paint your fingertips across my open palm, my wrist, my inner arm-- i clinch my fist tight lest your touch should fade too quickly... i feel you on my eyelids your soft, moist lips lingering on my dreaming eyes-- brushing across my face following the stains of my thirsty tears and sliding off my chin into predestined oblivion i feel you when i breathe you are the breath that catches in my chest i inhale you every bit of you becoming lost in the potency of your drug i breathe you heavy, deep... i feel you in my soul you caress the pith of me making love to my very essence you move me-- i feel you... -dgvarner 11-11-00 "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You certainly made me feel this!!! Excellent  Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Enjoyed the read dg..nicely written.. yes when you are in love..you can feel them no matter where you are..it is amazing.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, this is beautiful, my new favourite of yours, and you knew I'd say that I know. This is really brilliant love, I feel you on my eyelids your soft moist lips lingering on my dreaming eyes How wonderful is this, it's so full of truth I love it. (Yes you knew I'd say that too) Amazing isn't it love? Brilliant Dee love, marvellous now be good, but not too good Take care Bubbles  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sigmund Freud Junior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 38Come to my couch... |
Freud here.... Vhis is an obvious case of disjointed feel syndrom. Simptoms are imaginary ghost touchings conjoured up from bold imagery vhen thinking of a desired love. Other common Known simptoms are pink elephants playing in your hair, although vhis may not be your case. Frequent imaginings of none coporious beings, may not be good to one's emotional state. Frequent squeezing of one's pillow can sometimes relieve these imaginary feels. Other solutions might be, plane rides to foreign country's and clandistine meetings with distant strangers might even cure it. Also puffing on a big stogie cigar can also have a distracting affect. Freud. |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Wow, dg! I really feel this one. It is remarkable how real those feelings can be, isn't it? hugs To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
"following the stains of my thirsty tears" EXCELLENT!!!!! Powerful writing. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg, there is so much sweet tenderness in this piece. It does touch me, and my mind can see every imagined contact. This poem touches beyond physical contact, it touches the soul. Girl do you give good soul. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i feel you on my hands i reach for you... tenderly you paint your fingertips across my open palm, my wrist, my inner arm-- i clinch my fist tight lest your touch should fade too quickly... i feel you on my eyelids your soft, moist lips lingering on my dreaming eyes-- brushing across my face following the stains of my thirsty tears and sliding off my chin into predestined oblivion i feel you when i breathe you are the breath that catches in my chest i inhale you every bit of you becoming lost in the potency of your drug i breathe you heavy, deep... =============== WHEW...girl ya got the ache a-working here.. this is exactly how it feels... you have defined this ache and this kind of inner fire well... excellent emotive writing dg ... hey...when ya get a read outta "Ole Siggy" ... ya MUST be doing something right   take care jm |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Someones touch...the touch we all crave...yes girl nicely done |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now cowboy is left with a tingle or two and a craving for more numbness. What a superb piece to read on this wonderful Sunday afternoon. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
pepper..glad you could feel it..that means i accomplished my mission victoria..thank you amazing, and heart wrenching..marsha..yes i knew youd say something of the sort..  thank you much! siggy love! so good to hear from you..i heard, you might be in town...ah yes..those imaginary ghost touchings...nothing like bold imagery while thinking of a desired love...pink elephants..?? mar..yes..remarkable..  thanks mar dreamkeeper..thanks friend poet parker..if i have reached your soul..then i have done the very best that i can hope for.... jm..yes..the ache is in full force.. thanks a bunch.. hugs, dg < !signature--> "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 11-12-2000).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
paula..thank you much mark..thanks i'll see what i can do about that need for "more" lol hugs, dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Dg,...mhhm, lovely thoughts here. Heaps of feeling in this write,...it breathes it. Take care you. *Peace. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
spitfire..thanks so much for stopping in! glad you enjoyed  hugs,dg |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
dg, Wow, this was something!! You definitely have a need going on here. Very sensual . . . nice images. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Dgvarner~ this touched me...I could see it, and I could feel it......beautifully done -SEA |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, I had to come back, this is sooooo gooooooooood, and I love it. I truly do, this is another of your superb wonderful poems. Such a special way you have of writing and you know I love it, your work is never less than brilliant and this is no exception. Take care Be good, but not too good Bubbles Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- i just have to repeat what i said before about this one... WOW and OUCH...all at the same time... this aches so deeply...and i feel every word of it... you KNOW i can relate to that 'i feel you...' feeling...when the love hits you so hard that it hurts, and it feels like someone just kicked you in the gutt... i love this one...ache and all... great big hugs to you, oh pal of mine. love ya bunches, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
You got personification down to an art, dontcha? *grins* |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
lone wolf..thank you friend poet sea..ahh..but did it MOVE you...lol glad you liked.. thanks marsha..brilliant aye.. thanks many bunches! tricks..yep.....that.. intruder..why thank you friend! hugs, dg "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice poem |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
thought I'd rush in for another quick feel, to make my day.... whew.... I need a smoke and I don't even smoke.  Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
vandana..i thank you love puppy..so..how are you 'feeling' today...? put down that cig love..we're not done yet..... hugs,dg "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sweet |
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