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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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the poets pen we shared..together < !signature-->has run out of indelible ink the last chapter has been written sweet words i no longer drink your free spirit within the pages drifted from east to west a chapter in this novel i wondered..but issues went unaddressed.. the chapter.. Unfaithfulness turned out to be a volume a volume of mysteries and lies the saga of our love is over the woman..i hope you find a mystery about you i write only in my mind you the main character in this book and me on sands of true hearts bay you mr butterfly..fluttering around madam butterfly i portray this drama i write in pages of my mind you could of starred on broadway but mr butterfly..now a shadow a shadow in a neighborhood play A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 11-11-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Love the picture! This is an incredible piece, I read it so many times, it's very deep, Victoria, love your work! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Victoria, this is heartachingly poignant, but smooth, very smooth. Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful poetry, excellent piece. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Victoria, this is a very good poem, it's full of layers, and they are all amazing. Beautifully witten, and so aching with missed or lost dreams. Love it Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Victoria, this is wonderful! May I suggest you submit it to the main site? It's so good!  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
irish rose..thank you kathleen..the other one was all stretched out..i guess i resized it wrong, anyway i took another one yesterday..so glad you enjoyed hon kethry..thank you..i think this pen inspired more being empty then when it was full haa.. brian..thank you..nice of you to stop by.. Marsha..thank you..glad you peeked in happy you enjoyed..Poet devine..Gosh i thought this was the main forum haa...there must be a secret entrance way somewhere around here. thank you so glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
me like me like =) i agree with poet devine. great work. =) love ya jesse Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
I found this quite interesting and well written, Victoria. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Victoria, there certainly is much to take from this, So much depth. Great write. Love it as always. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Jesse..thank you mr.james ha..and for peeking in tonight..Hugs.. raindays..so glad you liked..nice to hear from you.. ron..a three year long saga haa.thanks ron and thanks for visiting.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Excellent flow; loved the thoughts you expressed so very well Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Victoria, the write you have shared is a good one but you already know that gurl... "A chapter in this novel I wondered but issues went unaddressed" "The mystery about you I write only in my mind" Hmmm... these veres sooooo compelling Thank you for this read Coco |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
peppermint..thank you for visiting pepper..nice to hear from you.. Coco..So glad you enjoyed Coco..i enjoyed writing it.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Words that are sad but words needing to be said..James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thanks for reading James..nice to hear from you.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
"a shadow in a neighborhood play"....ouch! This is good, Victoria.....very good. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Deery..nice of you to stop by.. Glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Victoria* Your poetry continues to grow to new heights...very much enjoyed!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I am happy you enjoyed BDC..thank you for peeking in today.. and your nice comments~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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