Open Poetry #10 |
Rebirth |
Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
The First Cause regards me with simple eyes As I bask in awful silence; Naked in eternal verity. Job's comforter wraps around my formless mind Inducing empty fallacies And constricting my iris to total blackness. Supple wonder pulls at the depths of my discord, Loosening twines of distrust and misconception. Doubt and vacillation fall aside As light is reclaimed by newborn eyes. The First Cause regards me with simple eyes As I bask in given rapture, Held by maternal arms; Oblivious of my past. Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
it reminds me of a babe bein born yuh very nice |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: god,you're good... and here's a 3-letter-word for ya.... wowowowowow... wait!! that had too many letters... just a reflection of my rebirth, i guess... thanks for coming back to passions... nice to see you, you little raccoon you |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh, Philip - You've got a metaphor in just about every line here... Pretty darned good, I'd say.. |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
wow- kind of just like that. only reincarnated would be a better word for it in this case. doreen- not that i like to call myself god...but thanks. *grins* Nan- Was about a year and a half, maybe two years ago when I posted this one for the Guess the Poet contest. Nobody thought I could write this. *grins* Maybe it's because I never wrote about religion beforehand, but I think it was the new style. And, I still prefer to use the heavy worded free verse. Thanks for all your help pushing me along from the beginning. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Masked Intruder, I'm not very religious as far as the bible goes-i couldn't tell someday a jot about the First Cause- but the power of the words, the way you've crafted this poem is magnificent. Wonderfully written. take care -Poeminister |
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