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Darkness |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA 
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A chill this wind leaves on my skin I can’t look out only within This lifeless breath I feel inside Disturbed and burnt I must confide That with each draw I taste no breath I try to move am stuck at rest This darkness in this box I see Leave no doubt my reality That when I wished for death to you And in this body hatred grew It took from me this life I had And burnt me up inside And now in death I lie in wake To pay for all that I forsake That led me in this dismal hole I’ve taken your forbidden soul And used at my freewill. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
love the last lines and the flow woowoo spike nice job Say it with me! "This poem was awesome! Terrific! Totally exciting!" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rich...this is so well DARK...that you would feel death in this way... |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Very thought-provoking; I enjoyed the read. Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whoa---where did this come from? Is different from you--I'm enjoying this very much Rich. You are writing deeper and better with every poem. (can ya feel me "beaming" at ya? grin...) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Rich, deep, deep write from you, loved it, yes even the heartbreak. be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you walt, Paula, Peppermint, Serenity and Kethra although dark sometimes we see things in a different light. nice to share my dark along with the light. Rich |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
So often justice seeks the harshest of dark correction...very nicely written, Spiked. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely written Rich ...yes indeed this was a dark one ok..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you Rainydays and Victoria Sometimes the darkness bleeds out of us. Rich |
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