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Rise of her breath
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Rise of her breath |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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My head on a pillow on her lap these eyes fall under lids heavy with peace was it a touch or her sigh that adjusted the fringe off my face? still I sleep yes I sleep as the rise of her breath rocks me against her breast and deeper deeper into her I fall yes my head held safe with love Angel of Darkness 11/11/2000 "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
well i am a guy so i liked this alot and i get the idea you are supposed to be a guy in the poem yuh yuh yuh...it did well for my senses o yuh Say it with me! "This poem was awesome! Terrific! Totally exciting!" |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Comforting angel! Like a kid in her mothers lap  *sigh* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
OH Maree--this is so tender!!! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful and sweet! Sometimes just being close to someone we love is so soothing.... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
maree-- the beauty and love of this touched my heart. beautiful poem full of tender- ness that mixed with your style and grace. simply breathtaking... take care. ~amy~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This one brought a soothing smile.  and like WhtDove it brought back the memories from so long ago of falling asleep in my Mothers lap. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
I sleep yes I sleep as the rise of her breath rocks me against her breast and deeper deeper into her I fall so so lovely!!!!!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dark Angel, lovely and loving with memories of childhood innocence. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
DarkAngel, a touching write !  Coco |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
this one does so paint the picture of comfort and contentment, Maree...a tranquil write...I loved it. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all so very much for your lovely replies and for taking the time to read. Angel, yes in my mothers lap oh how I miss those days, actually I might remind her of those days Again thanks all very much "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Maree, a tender moment you have penned, it touches the soul with the soothing moment of being safe and secure near someone you love so dearly. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Ahhh-- how soft and warm a picture you paint... a step from the womb perspective almost.. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
A tender sentiment so sweetly shared. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
an indulgence maree - but a nice one |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You are certainly absorbed in peaceful warm comforting thoughts in this one Angel...it's a wonderfully soft and soothing write ...ethome |
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