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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Stay with me As darkness falls …night closes in the dawn comes too quickly you must go this I know but stay… Tingling skin …a desire to begin A memory 'ere you go comes the dawn you are gone but for this time pretend you are mine and stay. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry....this is a song.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry, Kari's right this is a song, and it's beautiful. I love this it's so soft and flowing. Such a great feel to this one Kethry, one of your best I'm definitely saving this one. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine and Marsha, I'm glad you too could hear the music. It's makes the poem worthwhile. thanks Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kethry-- this is so beautiful. my heart smiles as it read this beautiful declaration of your heart. and i agree...it is a wonderful song. take care. ~amy~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thank you Amy, I'm glad you agree. be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, Kethry, very songlike, and full of love. Beautiful. Sandra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oooooooooooooooo wont you stay just a lil bit longer yuh yuh this rules love the flow and i hope he didnt go yuh |
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Highlander Member
since 2000-11-06
Posts 50Dundee, Scotland |
IT's more than a song, it's a melody Andrew |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Kethry* This is an amazing weave..the emotion you penned into this hits the reader in the heart and draws them close to the flame of your pleading...excellent writing~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kethry... me likes this poem me likes this tune me likes this rhythm me likes this mood  Great write PoetFriend Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Kethry: oooh can't believe I almost missed this one of yours I like it very much, it has much style! I too think it would make a lovely song - I can just hear the tune now Smiles for you Kethry! Roniece |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It would make a lovely song....and actually it does make one As always, I come away feeling the joy of experiencing the beauty of your work Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sandra, thank you. It's always a pleasure reading what you write both in your poetry and in your encouragement. It just flows. Wayoutwalt, thank you for putting those particular words in my head. Now I'm going to have to write something else to get them out. Highlander, thanks for the comment about tuneful, although if you heard me sing you wouldn't say that. I sing like a troll. Butterflies, as always thanks. Coco, thanks for the poem I enjoyed it so mush. Roniece, I'll take any smiles and hugs I can get. Thank you for giving me one. Pepper, your encouragement is all I need. Thank you Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry - you should know - you speak for me too |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Kethry, I wish I had written this! But then, I wouldn't have said it so well. Wonderful piece here...are you sure you didn't read my mind? jwesley |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'but for this time pretend you are mine and stay.' whoa! I can't begin to explain how I absolutely loved this one! what passion in so few lines! Great work, Kethry!! sp  I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Kethry I liked all the feelings you placed within this poem...lovely...James |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Kethry, yes...a song in your longing. I admire how lovely you've expressed it...wish I could do the same. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wilfred, thanks. I'm soglad we think alike, it means my poetry's getting better. jwesley, thanks for stopping by and commenting snowpants, thanks for the response jmlee12345, thanks for reading and responding. Rainydays, always a pleasure to hear from you. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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