Open Poetry #10 |
A Baby's First Snow |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Cast by the hands of the Maker above Kissed by the lips that gave us all love Breathed by the fire that gave us all life Is filled in the belly of my beautiful wife Held safe in the hands of the Cradler’s arm Taken at times and rescued from harm Hand in the air offered in surety Taken, unseen, felt is the purity Cast by the hands of the Maker above Kissed by the lips that gave us all love Breathed by the crystals that gave us all sight Filled in the sky with this blinding of light Watched by his parents, safe in the yard Baby's first snow, walking is hard He’s innocent, beautiful, lovely and young Kissed is the gift on his giggly tongue [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Oh a childs first snow flake on their tongue...I can hear his laughter..what a lovely sound and vision you have given me today. -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
The love of parent and child, evident in your words...Good show, Walt! Robert Joseph |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Walt, this one is so sensual. No, not sexual, but dealing with the senses, i.e. cold, touch of flakes, brisk wind through downy hair, curious thoughts as to what this cold, white stuff is, security found in parentals close by, exploring the unknown (the first step in a lifetime of discovery)...sensual. It reminds me of my first snow, one of the rare times it snowed in west Texas, back in 72. It's made all the more special, for that is my first memory I remember, if that makes any sense. Bundled up in a black and red snow-suit, barely able to move my arms and legs, marveling at this odd rain that moved so slowly, like feathers. Walt, this one surprised me, and took me back...way back. For that, I thank you. Alicat, who still loves playing in the snow. [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys i appreciate it with the comments yuh yuh Say it with me! "This poem was awesome! Terrific! Totally exciting!" |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Pretty Picture! I like the use of Maker and Cradler. Your flow and rhythm is very smooth. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx cruz yuh |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hey!!! This turned out great!!! I love the image it brings to mind. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx pdv for givin me the idea yuh |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ This is adorable - yep ... endearingly so. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
big smile |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I printed this one for my girls Walt, and get your fingers going and get back in here soon will ya? |
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