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My Favourite Girl (dream)
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My Favourite Girl (dream) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I was once in heaven one silent cool winter day, and I saw you there waiting on my best, in a soft shield of tenderness. We were wrapped in satin sheets and could hear our heartbeats talk and I reached for you and smiled. Then I imagined we were in a timeless stream and that we we're an endangered king and queen. This filled the image with fear. The fact that we we're superior and noble but so afraid. Did we have servants of the kind loyal type and if so, where were they? Suddenly! I was taken with shock as the worst of the servants, an evil bard was quoting the first bard's black MacBeth while holding a sword above your neck! I reached for you across the bloody bed and screamed at the world!.... I woke up! beside my favourite girl. You gave me smiling looks and reached to stroke my face, soft strokes, long and smooth, full of lazy love. For all our years you'd proved yourself a lady. You whispered in my ear, familiar love, you said, "come to me, I'm going crazy!" I pulled you to my chest and tried to kiss your words, now I'm going crazy! or is this still a dream? Now here, I manage to know I'm raising up to roam the meadow, so I can't be dreaming.... and as I pressed hard I heard you say, "come to me, I'm going crazy!" I could feel the flames of passion devouring my thighs as your velvet skin lay exposed before me, the fire within blazing hot! A droopy eyed smile filled your face. Suddenly! you're in my arms, your wine flavoured tongue probing mine. and then I hear you loud and clear "The kids are late for school!!" I wake up to see my favourite girl. "The kids are late for school!!" she says, half smiling like she knew where we'd just been. [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
could hear our heartbeats talk...ahhhhhhhh such a beautiful thought E. thank you  for sharing~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
LOL ethome...the kids are late for school...reality mixed with fantasy...what a wonderful write |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you nkdthoughts for taking the time to read and make your comments.....ethome |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Touching on so many aspects of your life in one little writing. You are my new hero for the next ten minutes! *grins* I'm going to go see if I can put so many pictures into one page of writing. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
ethome~ This is such a wonderful read....well penned my friend  loved itTracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Paula for your comments I really appreciate them....ethome Thanks Masked...hope you do all right with the pictures. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very, very nice...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you jmlee and Tracie for the kindnes in your comments...much appreciated....ethome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is so darn sweet and adorable... that I almost didnt notice the lack of E-rhymes  what a sincere lil' gem this is... aint it funny how life gets in the way *smile* ... I love looking at love and life thru your eyes... things are so much more poetic later-dont-wake-me-from-the-dream-gator jm |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I can hear you....the kids are late for school... nicely done. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Beautifully done! I love the way you weave between reality and the dreamlike fantasy (is it really a dream?) of life. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the comments Janet....it's just me experimenting with different styles and loving the creative avenues there is to travel......more relaxing enjoyment almost like the first cup of coffee in the morning......thanks again...ethome Thanks Charisma you can relate to the kids part, well that's great, especially if you've been wakened from a wonderful dream to find out things are going behind in reality. Thanks rascal for the reply to this poem... no it's not a personal situation...just something I saw in a dream...thanks again. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--glad that I found this wonderful gem...with pieces of your life so well cemented on a dream...made me smile in memory of similar happenings in my own life. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Martie for your upbuilding comments I truly appreciate them and I wish you the best....thanks again for dropping in glad you could relate to some of this...ethome |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
ethome-- this was very creative and seems i'm not the only one who has a "big huge heart". your dream girl is very lucky whether it be dream or reality. excellent poem! take care. ~amy~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Amy thank you and you do have a great big heart and you should be proud...ethome |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, this is a magical quality, that took me with you for the dream. I really love this one, it's full of love, and dreams. Beautiful, and then the reality kicks in and that's lovely too. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
ethome Your words spoke a volume of unspoken words, both of which spoke clearly to my passionate senses. A very captivating read, romantic, passonate, and beautiful Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Marsha I really look forward to your replies and I will keep in touch.. your poet friend ......ethome |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
so enjoyed reading this one Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Elizabeth for your comments I always like to hear from you....ethome Thank you Marie for taking the time to read this poem...much appreciated...ethome |
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