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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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All around me falls silent, the gulls fly by not speaking magpies stop crying and the cat's muffled his miaow even the ocean lies dormant, closing its eyes to the still of the day, I notice the trees and shrubs are alive but don't seem to be growing in this state of quietness imagine that? these walls lean over me as the absence of sound captures the pride of the evening sun she blushes the cheeks of my loved ones happily smiling at me from their frames of course, I smile back I turn my eyes toward the mountains as the day rests behind them, funnily enough, in this muted interval of time they speak to me with perfection, they are audible with the curve of their beauty Yes, all around me in uninterrupted silence I hear only them Angel of Darkness October 2000 |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
of course I smile back What a wonderful observation this is. It is just a great vision,, I would love to see this snapshot.......the poem turned out to be a masterpiece Maree!!!! i love it.  Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Maree this is absolutely beautiful!  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes I must agree Maree, beautiful. Parker |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Beautiful indeed!!! Lovely, lovely read  Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Maree this is just such a beautiful read..very tender, well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mick Hawkes Member
since 2000-10-26
Posts 90Tees-side , England |
Great... enjoyed it alot..thanks A smile a day helps you work , rest & play. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, thanks so much my friend for lovely reply and for your input and help toward this poem Sharon thanks so much hon James, thank you my friend Peppermint, thank you for stopping by and reading Tracie, thanks hon Hi Mick, Thank you so much "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Glad you changed the cat line hon ~giggle~ ...seriously - I have to agree with Jamie. This is very very good Maree. Well done. K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
"All around me falls silent, the gulls fly by not speaking magpies stop crying and the cat's muffled his miaow even the ocean lies dormant, closing its eyes to the still of the day, I notice the trees and shrubs are alive but don't seem to be growing in this state of quietness imagine that? these walls lean over me as the absence of sound captures the pride of the evening sun she blushes the cheeks of my loved ones ......." Maree, up to that point this is really excellent easily one of your best! The line breaks were especially well done i thought particularly in this section: "falls silent, the gulls fly by not speaking magpies stop crying and the cat's muffled his miaow even the ocean lies dormant," however after "loved ones", although the message is clear and makes a nice ending, the imagery seems to lose some of it's power somehow: "smiling happily from frames", and "curve of their beauty" seem a little too familiar to me, especially as you are usually so brilliant at original thought. anyway, all in all, the first part of the poem shines so much that these little moans of mine don't matter ....lol you get better and better... P |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
That silence can be golden, can't it? Just like your poem! This is sooooo beautiful, Maree! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ 'these walls lean over me as the absence of sound captures the pride of the evening sun she blushes the cheeks of my loved ones happily smiling at me from their frames of course, I smile back' Absolutely stunning ... a familiarity that is not elusive and evokes a fondness of thought-filled memories. You are such a wonderful writer. Well done, sweet poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--Wonderfully done...beautiful picture you paint!! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Oh--- and that spelling we discussed.......  Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DA~ Wow......so beautiful...I love the way you make me see things through your eyes...excellent!! -SEA |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Stunning Maree! What a beautiful moment in time you've captured and expressed so vividly ... wonderfully written and filled with tender emotions! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
You're not a dark angel...you're brilliant...I went back to read this 3 times...it captivated me...beautiful. I have such a beautiful postcard of a dream like moment in my head...you angel of light. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
SB, yes hon so am I, and thanks for that advice giggling too Thanks for your reply hon AAAhhhhhhh Sherlock!!! Top of the morning to you Sir I have to agree with you my humble friend, it did kind of die didn't it? hmmm I've posted one in CA for you so that your moans do matter I like to hear those moans of yours MP  Thank you for your always nice replies Denise, yes it can be golden and it was thank you for your lovely reply. Oh Marge, wow you pay me a wonderful compliment Thank you! *hugs*Martie, Thank you so much sweet one Jamie, you mean this, the correct spelling  MIAOW  Thanks Hon Sea, it is wonderful that I am able to make you see things through my eyes, wish I could say the same for my son hahaha What a lovely reply Kit Thank you.ok Ron, you've managed to make me blush  with your lovely reply, Thank you so much "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Maree, this is stunning in it's simplicity, I particularly liked I smile back. It drew me in and I read on entranced. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Maree...sorry hon...you are WRONG WRONG WRONG It is either: Meow Miao or Mew NEVER EVER Miaow... never get RID of that WWWW!!! HAHAH........ K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My little Darling, Gorgeous, Wonderful, cute little kiwi friend hehehe No No No I am not wrong darrrrling hehe, I have been a many of time, and am glad to say not this time Good old oxford came in handy love you hon! "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
shgoai76oajgakjgaepr8lkgjI3765doutgjlakgj!!!!!! ~Sulk~ HUMPH Go away... (only I can be right...) [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
K-- there is no reasoning with her on the matter--though her dictionary was outvoted 5-1 by other dictionaries.... some stubborn angel huh???---lol--  Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
even the ocean lies dormant, closing its eyes to the still of the day, ======================== these walls lean over me as the absence of sound captures the pride of the evening sun she blushes the cheeks of my loved ones happily smiling at me from their frames of course, I smile back I turn my eyes toward the mountains as the day rests behind them, funnily enough, in this muted interval of time they speak to me with perfection, they are audible with the curve of their beauty Yes, all around me in uninterrupted silence I hear only them ======================= Maree...this is EXCELLENT... what a very cool poem >>"in uninterrupted silence I hear only them"<< what a very cool line ... perfect imagery and expression wonderful piece of work.. captures "you" perfectly me thinks take care jm |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
JM, Thanks so much hon I appreciate you stopping by NOW, Jamie my friend, my dear, see that red engine you have at the top of the page?? Me thinks I'll send him down to SQUIRTT you huh? how about that? plus, you said it was 4 to 1, not only can't you spell, hehehe you don't have a good memory....  AHAHA"If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
My memory is just fine dear one:/ me·ow (m-ou) n. 1.The cry of a cat. 2.Informal. A malicious, spiteful comment. v. intr. me·owed, me·ow·ing, me·ows. To make the crying sound of a cat. [Imitative.] Pronunciation Key Source: The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Third Edition Copyright © 1996, 1992 by Houghton Mifflin Company. Published by Houghton Mifflin Company. All rights reserved. meow \Me*ow"\, v. i. & n. See 6th and 7th Mew. Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc. Mew \Mew\, v. i. [Of imitative origin; cf. G. miauen.] To cry as a cat. [Written also meaw, meow.] --Shak. Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc. meow n : the sound made by a cat (or any sound resembling this) [syn: mew, miaou, miaow] v : cry like a cat; "the cat meowed" Source: WordNet ® 1.6, © 1997 Princeton University meow MEOW: in Acronym Finder Source: Acronym Finder, © 1988-2000 Mountain Data Systems xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx 1 entry found. miaow n : the sound made by a cat (or any sound resembling this) [syn: meow, mew, miaou] v : make a cat-like sound [syn: miaou] Source: WordNet ® 1.6, © 1997 Princeton University now, please excuse me because I really must run  Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
My memory is just fine dear one:/ me·ow (m-ou) n. 1.The cry of a cat. 2.Informal. A malicious, spiteful comment. v. intr. me·owed, me·ow·ing, me·ows. To make the crying sound of a cat. [Imitative.] Pronunciation Key Source: The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Third Edition Copyright © 1996, 1992 by Houghton Mifflin Company. Published by Houghton Mifflin Company. All rights reserved. meow \Me*ow"\, v. i. & n. See 6th and 7th Mew. Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc. Mew \Mew\, v. i. [Of imitative origin; cf. G. miauen.] To cry as a cat. [Written also meaw, meow.] --Shak. Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc. meow n : the sound made by a cat (or any sound resembling this) [syn: mew, miaou, miaow] v : cry like a cat; "the cat meowed" Source: WordNet ® 1.6, © 1997 Princeton University meow MEOW: in Acronym Finder Source: Acronym Finder, © 1988-2000 Mountain Data Systems xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx 1 entry found. miaow n : the sound made by a cat (or any sound resembling this) [syn: meow, mew, miaou] v : make a cat-like sound [syn: miaou] Source: WordNet ® 1.6, © 1997 Princeton University now, please excuse me because I really must run Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
what a great and lovely image have you penned for us.....I really enjoyed reading it. well done ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
LOL@Jamie... keep running...from scary Mmy... (I tell you she is frightening - and I know... (her cat Tuggles - he's cute though...he mews - without a doubt) K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Charisma, Thank you so very much for your lovely reply -------------------------------- AHEM Jamie, yes ok, but it was only 4 yesterday and 5 today. so tell me, where does miaou come from? curious now  Sweet little Kiwi butterfly, ummm hon, WHO SIDE ARE YOU ON ANYWAY???? HHMMmmmmm? yeah Tuggles is cute isn't he? just like his owner... let me tell you! hehehehe  "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
What a vision... truly transcending! Thank you & Miaow! "Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind!"...Dr. Seuss [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
lissen here this is perfection woohoo...if alot o different people spell meow differently then we have a meow mix...meow mix meow mix please deliver!! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maree- This is simply beautiful! And I dont care how meow miaow is spelled...simply lovely still LOL. Excellent writing...was in the Archives and decided to bring this one back up hon. Take care... hugs, amy |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Maree I'm glad this came back up front again, I've read this so many times now, and now it's going in my library, so I don't lose it again. thanks. it is beautifully brilliant. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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