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If Only Memories Could
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If Only Memories Could |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Lying here, Alone again, All I can do To warm my soul From the relentless chill Of loneliness, I look back on the time When I could effortlessly Stare at your face. If only memories Could fulfill the desire Embedded in my soul, I would not have this longing To be in your arms; I would not miss the way The pain would diminish At your touch. If only memories Could replenish my soul, I would not need to hear Your reassuring words. You convinced me Of the certainty of love When I would not believe; You gave your all To persuade me. Now I miss you terribly And wait impatiently To feel your arms Around me again. I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the ache and sad longing comes through and touches the heart......beautiful  -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kris-- such a sad yet beautiful poem...full of much longing. as always, i stand in awe of your talent. take care my friend! ~amy~ |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Snowpants, So much loneliness and heartache in here. Please remember that we are all with you at Passions. All with arms open offering our love and compassion. Cheer up! "Now I miss you terribly And wait impatiently To feel your arms Around me again". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
SEA: thank you! I'm glad you liked it!! Amy: thank you, as always, for your wonderful replies, my friend!!  Daniel: that is too sweet, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
snowpants, I can feel the ache of longing and memories throughout this one. Maybe someday, it will be for good. Hang in there. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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The Poetic Plumber Junior Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 38 |
It gave me a saddened feeling as I read the words of your poem. You can so express yourself. You are such a wonderlful poet. I hope and pray that things will get better. Just keep on writing. Roger |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I remember this feeling. Beautiful poetry, but don't drive yourself crazy waiting. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
"If only", words I live by, unfortunately. This is lovely, and inspired, and I hope you can bring him back from the memory and into now.. Sandra |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
LW: thanks! and I hope you're right! Roger: well, I am flattered by your words. Thank you so much!! I'm glad you enjoyed!!  Temptress: thanks for the words of advice. much appreciated. Sandra: thank you, my friend. But, I really don't think so. glad you stopped by!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hi...ummm, I haven't read your poem yet. But don't worry, I will. The title just caught my eye and I wanted to say something about it before I read the poem. "If Only Memories Could." I wonder what you are going to say about that. Are you going to say that memories can do anything...or that memories can do nothing, although they are everything? I, personally, think it's the former. Memories, to me, can do anything. I believe that a memory is just an extension of the imagination, and I for one have a very extensive imagination. My imagination can do pretty much anything and everything I can ask. And if I incorporate a memory into my imagination, the possibilities are endless. I am going to go read your poem now. BRB. Okay...apparently I can't go back and read it. So I'm just gonna submit this one...then I'll be back. Again. *Grins* |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Back. Sorry about the wait. I figured it's two thirty in the morning in Kansas, so if you're still awake waiting for me...then it certainly isn't my problem. LOL Certainly wasn't what I was expecting, but not entirely what I wasn't expecting either. I guess my imagination just gets the better of me at times. I wonder if you have to stay in a little dream world for the effects to be entirely effective. Now you got me thinking again... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Loved it !!!!!!! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you have said it so well...excellent penned. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
So sad, my friend......I can feel the ache here, and know that feeling too well. You do know how to write with your heart, and that makes your work beautiful......(pardon the tears, ok)  Follow your dream! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Masked intruder: well, then. perhaps we were a little tired there? LOL Just kidding. I appreciate the time you took to comment on my work and your opinion of 'memories.' Very thoughtful of you. Thanks! vandana: thanks!! Charisma: thank you for reading!! Sunny: that is a great compliment, my friend. I truly appreciate your wonderful reply. (love the tears, btw) sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh how I know this |
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