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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA 
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Too Many... - Jeff Osborne 2000 (V1.) I’m being pulled too many different directions The stress is beginning to show My search for answers just creates more questions So many things I still don’t know (Chorus) Am I trying too hard? Or not hard enough? Too many lines in the water Are you making this easy? Or am I making it tough? Too many roads to travel Am I being too gentle? Or do you like it rough? (V2.) I’m still playing games but I’ve forgotten the rules This beauty I tried to create Threw away the instructions and blunted the tools And now I fear it’s too late (Chorus) (Bridge) Where’s my three-wish genie? Where’s my happy ending? Where’s my dream come true? My fairy tale princess is still sleeping My Cinderella is still missing her shoe (Chorus) …and I still don’t know what to do |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Jeff....such a sad song...yet beautifully written...I'm still playing the game but I've forgotten the rules...this sounds so familiar...ya need a shoulder Im here willing to listen< !signature--> Don't close your eyes to the possibilities [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 11-09-2000).] |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Thanks Paula. I'm working through the grief; it's just difficult when you feel like you are running out of places to turn and you're not sure you like what you see in the mirror either. But I'm still smiling  ) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Jeff, sad song but soooo well written. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I believe I was in this place not so many months ago and you just persevere thru because you have to and the day will arrive when you are past this and life seems to be going your way again...James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jeff-- such a heartfelt and sad "song" you have penned here. i am sorry for your pain and truly hope things get better for you. i know it's easy to say...but coming from someone whose been there, you will smile again. take care! ~amy~  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jeff~ this is fantastic! I really liked this song a lot. -SEA |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Thank you, Kethry )James and Amy, Thanks for your words of encouragement. I'd say that I'm a combination of a realist and an optimist (translation: sh_t happens but I'm still smiling! lol) so I'm sure that I will be OK. I'm just not ready to quit the dream yet. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Jeff it's good to make your aquaintance here...the most of what I write is lyric oriented and I enjoy that style...I can see the pattern here and these are good lyrics .. I really like the bridge... love the words.. I also like how you set the hook in the first vs. and the chorus..."Too Many" good stuff!! |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
ethome, Your words of praise for my song are especially appreciated; you're the first person who has critiqued and complimented my "lyrical" style. Although I enjoy writing poetry, I am first and foremost a musician and it has always been my desire to put my words to music. Thank you for recognizing the song in addition to the sentiment. - Jeff |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Nothing worse than a "shoeless" Cinderella. I'd love to hear this set to music, along with your other works. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hi, Jeff...am singing the same tune now ...enjoyed the repetition..and am looking for my 3 wish genie...too  ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
SEA and nakdthoughts (love the name!), thanks for the compliments Tara, We can't have barefoot women running around just taking over the place! C'mere already and let me put this glass slipper on ya babeee! lol I hope one day to set my words to music and to play them for you. Thanks - Jeff |
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