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PoetryNest
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0 posted 2000-11-09 03:40 AM


How Peaceful, This Night

Tea cup in hand, I carefully open the wooden screened door
making my way ‘round the side table, to my favorite chair;
an oversized, carved oak rocker.
The muted floral back pillow, a little worn, is so comfortable.
From my porch, I smile and enjoy the sweetness
in the cup of freshly brewed mint tea,
while being lulled by tranquil landscape.

This time of year, so beautiful, as life renews itself
turning barren branches into soft spring greenery
inviting colorful song birds to nest.
The early bulbs have sprouted, sprinkling pastel hues
extending from the distant cracked-white gateway
and cascading around the rock footpath, leading to my porch.
Down the road a way, I hear the neighbor call her little ones to supper.

Placing the tea cup on the lace doily
my hand skims over my favorite book,
my book of memories, from long ago and far away.
Oh, I’ve forgotten my glasses. Are they on the bed stand, or....??
Well, no matter. I’m forever misplacing something.
Still, my mind cradles these images with unfaded clarity
and remembers a time when I could waltz on the breeze.

Feeling the evening air, I draw my shawl closer.
My aging companion, so peaceful, now rests, curled up on my lap.
Her fluffy, silver fur reflects the finality
of this rose and violet sunset.
So beautiful, the coming of this night,
as heaven displays her lights.
How gentle, this night
taking me back to a night long ago.
How peaceful, this night...


Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor

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Nan
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1 posted 2000-11-09 07:48 AM


Peaceful, indeed - You almost make me want to switch to tea...
BSC
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2 posted 2000-11-09 07:49 AM


PN ~ What a wonderful poem, so full of beautiful imagery, I felt as though I were watching this whole scene unfold. Just  lovely ... Bonnie
inot2B
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3 posted 2000-11-09 09:15 AM


Oh how nice. Sometimes I forget where I put my glasses, but all I have to do is close my eyes and I to can see the book of memories from long ago. You did a wonderful job on helping me see this picture.
PoetryNest
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4 posted 2000-11-09 11:15 AM


Thank you for taking time to read and comment, Nan.
I know it's often difficult to show one's pace, to the speed
of this type this mood set. If you could change one thing about this piece, what would it be ?

Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor

PoetryNest
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5 posted 2000-11-09 11:32 AM


Thank you, Bonnie. I'm delighted you found this worthwhile.
Sometimes I read it and think, "hmmm, a bit boring",
but I can't think of a way to deliver the mood of her
last evening, and pick-up the pace at the same time.
Suggestions are welcome. Thanks again.  

Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor

PoetryNest
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6 posted 2000-11-09 11:51 AM


Thank you for your reply, inot2B. Do you think that the
hint of this being her last night, was too subtle ?
I'm not sure how to make it more obvious to the reader,
and still set the mood of her pace, deliver her
pre-death thoughts, and still use her voice.
Thanks again. Happy you liked.  

Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2000-11-10 02:21 PM


An excellent poem of wonderful reflections... very wistful and satisfying read... "I remember a time when I could waltz on the breeze.".....very good read much appreciated........ethome
PoetryNest
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Orlando, FL. 32703
8 posted 2000-11-10 09:45 PM


Thank you for reading and taking time to comment, ethome.
Everyone is so sweet. You have a very nice place here. Thank you !  

Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor


Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
9 posted 2000-11-10 09:55 PM


Sounds like the perfect place to watch the
day come to an end...or a new day
rise...such beautiful imagery...I can only
dream that someday this shall be my reality
it sounds absolutely breathtaking and
yes...peaceful.  Excellent writing~

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