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Lost At Sea |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
I am a writer, No shut eye at night. Lost at sea, By moonlight I write. Countless thoughts rage in my mind, These racing feelings I’ve confined. Memories past, future dreams to be told, Love, success, maybe someone to hold. Waves are rough and time is near GOD is my captain, the ears that hear. Let me sleep Lord, put this mind to rest, I’ve jumped through the loops, passed your test. Exhausted and human I am Reach down my Lord and take my hand. This sea is wicked and cold, My heart,my soul,still new, my body is getting old. Guide me straight to the shore, Let me live a good life Lord, Just let me live once more. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i dont see any imperfections here..another lovely poem..enjoyed very much..  ~Victoria~ |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
i definitly echo Victoria's words. ron |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
Thank you Victoria and Ron. I can take criticism though.. Im not sure how to make a smile on here yet but this is my smile..  ) Thank you both. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
once again this is another terrific poem. your not alone with the thoughts raging at night there just happens to be times for all writers, the creativity flows, I to seem to write more at night. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
once again this is another terrific poem. your not alone with the thoughts raging at night there just happens to be times for all writers, the creativity flows, I to seem to write more at night. |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
Thank you Rosebud. I tend to have lots of sleepless nights and still no words flow. Just lost of tossing and turning. Take Care. PLY |
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Kevin Dallas New Member
since 2000-11-10
Posts 2 |
This is so good, can't say how much it touched me, special meaning is understood. |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
Thank you Kevin. One day I hope to begine my life. Thank you once more. GOD bless! PLY |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
p_i, Welcome to Passions!! This was nice writing here. I like the rhyme scheme you used. Good message. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Hello. Welcome! I liked this poem much. Nicely written. "...no single sound too rude Upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." --Ed |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
L.W. & Poe.... Thank you both very much for your support. I dont have much time to write so these two are just ...throw togethers..if ya know what I mean. PLY |
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