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“Peel Me Like a Grape”
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“Peel Me Like a Grape” |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England 
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 It was just an invitation to a party with some friends... I didn’t say for sure I’d go, but that it all depends... But now I find I’m standing here, amidst a crowd afloat with beer... I feel your eyes, they peel me like a grape... The room is unfamiliar, and the faces very strange... The music’s thumping louder, and the whole place seems deranged... And when I turn, we’re face to face... two strangers in a stranger place... Your eyes meet mine, and peel me like a grape... You pierce through my composure with your penetrating gaze... Subject to your exposure, and your sharp all-seeing ways... I know that I can’t hide from you... Each layer you can see right through... and with your eyes, you peel me like a grape... I get the eerie feeling that my soul has been exposed... You’ve seen right through the solid door that I was keeping closed... My layers you have pulled away... I’m naked to the light of day... Your eyes caress, and peel me like a grape... Now I’m at your mercy, and will be forevermore... I don’t care what’s up ahead, or even what’s in store... I’ve come to love your tender gaze... It speaks of all your loving ways... So, with your eyes... Please, peel me like a grape... Follow your dream! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lil sis, amazing, this is soooooooo good lil sis, absolutely marvellous. I really love this one truly, the eyes again they always do it for me. Wonderful, sis wonderful. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Sunny! I love the style you've written this in. The flow is wonderful throughout, and the repetition really works in this piece ... loved the description, great writing!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I love this, I absolutely love it!!!!!!! How did you get that picture up there...it's so, so juicy!! Sunny, this is original, and passionate. ummmm "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Hi Big Sis ~~~ Ah...thank you so very much, dear.....and grapes are always good, even for breakfast, as it is time now!!!  ~~~ Hi Kit ~~~ Thank you, my good friend.....and I appreciate your stopping in to read this one!! ~~~ Hi Kathleen ~~~ Well....the picture went through my art program, I resized it, framed it, uploaded it to my graphics storage site, wrote it in on my 'new post', and here it is!!! I really am glad the juiciness came through, as grapes should be juicy!! Thank you!! Follow your dream! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunny1~ Wow! This made me grin....... I just love the idea of a man peeling me like a grape with his eyes.......great poem! -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunny. . . I've got my grape peelers all ready. . .  I love this one. . . just really sensuous and smart. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ SEA ~~~ Yep....there is something really sexy about the first time your eyes meet, but you start to feel that stare even before that!! Thank you.... ~~~ Sven ~~~ Just go gentle, so as not to spill any juicy stuff!! Thank you!! Follow your dream! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey sunny1 this is great!! you really did a wonderful job and to use that old song title was such a stroke of genius!! I love listening to that song when Diana Krall sings it....but you did it up fine and put a ribbon on it....take care....ethome |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ ethome ~~~ I hate to admit it, but I've never heard the song......or can't remember hearing it. I think maybe my muse heard it and decided to steal the title.....oh, well.....titles to songs are up for grabs, so I didn't really steal!! Thank you!! Follow your dream! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Never peeled my grapes...just kinda ate them bit by bit, skin and all. Lovely poem Sunny1...indeed. jwesley |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Gotta peel ya to get to the juicy stuff don't we? Wow....lovely write my sister. Hmmmmm don't think I could get away with that staring gaze do you? Oh well, tenderness of the heart and love of a really great sister means more to me anyway.  ssshhhhhh.... |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Grapes indded are very sensual, just feed them to each other, and youll see. And this poem is also sensous and reveals the willing to be exposed to the eyes of a special one. And as for the peel...well, that just adds to moment. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ jwesley ~~~ Next time you eat grapes, just try peeling a few!! It takes longer, but is well worth the effort!! Thank you, too!! ~~~ Mark ~~~ You are the greatest brother a girl could have, and that's how it is!! I can see we would fight over the grapes at a family dinner!! Ha!! Love 'ya!! ~~~ Ron ~~~ Yep.....you got the meaning nailed on the head!! I still think you'd be a great songwriter, as you always pick up on the deep meanings. I agree....slower is better!! Follow your dream! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
WOW, Sunny, this poem got me raisin!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Sunny, yes, this is such an exhilerating moment, when he looks at you with that look, and you feel it, and look back. Mmm, think I need to get out more.. This was written in such a flowing, and enjoyable style, as all your poems. Sandra |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Balladeer ~~~ Well.....it's better to be a-raisin' than an old prune!!! Ha!!! Thank you, sir!!! ~~~ Sandra ~~~ That first look is always the most intense!! Good to see you this morning!! Follow your dream! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunny1~ Such a depth of anticipation here - Sensually done, sweet poet. We will peel no grape before it's time.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Marge ~~~ Ahhhhhhh......anticipation is the sweetest part of that first contact!! Thank you for joining me this morning, my friend, and I promise not to peel any grapes before their time!! Ha!! Follow your dream! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Yow! Sunny I loved this! … makes we want some strawberries and cream for breakfast, or even frozen grapes… After all, I’ve heard fruit is best in the morning .~ Beth |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sunny girl what can I say? That look is always the best...that first clash that teasing tempting meeting of desire. Great write darlin Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
Sunny1 this is a lovely poem. Best wishes Jon |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Beth ~~~ Next to grapes....strawberries and creme make the perfect breakfast in bed!!!! Thank you so much!! ~~~ Paula ~~~ Yes, I certainly agree....although nowadays, it could also be that first "email"!!!! Thank you, my twin!! ~~~ Jon ~~~ Thank you so much for your sweet reply, and you know that I appreciate you stopping in for a bit of fruit!! Follow your dream! |
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