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Death of Love
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Death of Love |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I am not here you can’t see me my soul is gone living free My heart is torn lying shattered there hopes once pinned float into thin air Smiles taken hugs given in love what in the world was I thinking of? This feeling surely wasn’t meant to be at least I’m sure, not for me. Death of love? no not for me never was it born in your heart for me |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh. 'klaindifly' might be appropriate here Sharon.... this one just appeals... K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So sad, Sharon. Very well written. Denise |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
My heart is torn lying shattered there hopes once pinned float into thin air This cries it all. Broke my heart in the process. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Satpsych Sharon! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Yikes! Did someone pee in your Wheaties this morning?  Sorry!This is so sad Sharon. Sounds like being in love with someone that don't know you exist. I love the format of this, and the feelings that just flow from it! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
p d valentine your such a good pot writer yuh |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"This feeling surely wasn’t meant to be at least I’m sure, not for me." Poet deVine, this is such evocative writing, and I think I can relate to your message. It's so hard loving invisibly. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sadetion deVine. . . quiet sadetion. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your beautuful even when your blue... excellent writing ... perfection of presentation as well. take care jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I must ditto the satpsych...but that sounds so cold...so please, can I just say that I loved it? and that I could really relate to this one, and I think it's excellent writing and a really great poem? Can I, huh, huh? and would it be really cliche' if I closed with HUGS? Or should I be really original and say I wanna have your baby? ROFLMFAO... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sad, feeling the ache in your heart, and matching it.. Take care. Sandra |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
OH Sharon ... your words paint such an aching picture, so incredibly well done, and with such impact ... beautiful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, Matchless presentation. Your knock of words opens the door to many a soul. Sy |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
bunches of sadness packed into this, deVine one  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
these words have the impact of being hit in the chest with a floor safe - took the wind out of me felt my ribs press on my lungs - I know not the fool who messed with your heart - but your sadness wrenched me very much |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I'm without the proper words to tell you how this truly affected me...stunning work PoetD~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Sharon, a sorrowful poem presented in a style I admire, striking work my dear.Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Very sad......and heart felt....very nicely written. Jenn E |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
PDV, Sadness personified. *HuGS* Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sweet PdV this is so sad, you have expressed the sadness very well Winged ~HUHG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sometimes I feel that some one has listened to my dreams (or nightmares) and written them down in a poem. This is one of those times, Sharon. It's hard to love and not know what is returned. But our hearts are stronger than we think. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Isn't it amazing when we read something we felt at one time and yet in another's words? I personally feel love doesn't die, call me a romantic, sometimes it's not love and we think it is. I'm rambling...loved this. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind replies. This poem sort of oozed out of me....so the feelings were there. I'm so glad Passions is the kind of place where we can share our feelings so honestly. Thank you for being here.  |
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