Open Poetry #10 |
When Last He Loved Me |
Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
When Last He Loved Me I feel his breath on every breeze Hear his whispers in the trees Feel him beside me in bed at night Once again, he’s holding me tight Drifting off to peaceful sleep Wrapped in comfort so warm so deep Loneliness again kept at bay Until morning shines another day I wake to find I’m alone in bed The images just in my head Embraced til dawn— by a memory Remembering… when last he loved me |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tara~ Absolute beauty in the sadness of this penning. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Tara, this is very beautiful, and sad. You have done it again, you write the most heartfelt words. Sandra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Why won't those memories ever go away? Very touching my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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pmc Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48Germany |
Great Poem, I liked it a lot pmc. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A splendid poem Tara expressed with a sense of heartache yet whispered in soft gentle words... Coco |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
beautiful, my friend jwesley |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
so beautifully sad. Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Sven, my guess is because we won't let them go. Thanks everyone for the replies. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Such memories that can never be erased, I feel with you... that same feeling. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Tara* This is laced with exquisite emotion and depth...your writing has brought tears to my eyes tonight~ |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
Tara, is it that we won't let them go or that our heart can't let them go? I think it is that we can't, not won't. I know that pain and I am willing to let them go, my heart can't. Well written and heart break is sad but it is what we do with it. You have done very well expressing it. Pain that is hard to find the right words takes a good poet to write them. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Tara-The heart does seem to hold on in ways we can't understand, you've captured the feeling well, nicely done. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Tara there is no cure for missing someone just the hope to displace that feeling with love for someone else. Beautiful poem Rich |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wow this is good writing...James |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Tara, You express your feelings so beautifully through your words. I know too well how difficult it is to find solace in sleep when you know that you're going to wake up alone. Waking up from dreams and realizing that they have become memories. Well done, my muse -Jeff |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I'd say that you're right Tara. . . *sigh* Had to read this one again. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
BDC, thank you. To be able to make the emotions felt by the reader is high praise. JMLee, lol, you don't have to sound so surprised! Sven, thanks for the bump to the top. Jeff, I still say we should write that duet together. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Any duet but that one, my muse ) I just can't "say goodbye" - Jeff |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Well, who says that we should say "Good-bye"? Perhaps we should just say, "so long" Goodbyes are so, well, just so "goodbye like" Great poem. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Passions Voice, perhaps we should write a "thanks for the memories" poem. The good times, after all, were great. I treasure them more than gold. Only the end was tarnished. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
It has been a pleasure to watch you grow blossom as a poet...your work becoming increasingly more beautiful by the poem...this is no exception. Sadly, but yet beautifully penned. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Sorry for the bump to the top, but I just had to thank you, Ruth for the gracious comments. Your praise really means a lot to me. I admire you greatly, both for your wonderful abilities as a writer and as the strong woman you are. Thank you, from the bottom of my heart. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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