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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-11-07 11:42 AM


A gallery of whispers
mysteries
mockingly unravel--
I walk the corridors
at night,
to greet the dawn, a judges' gavel.

Each memory, in
witness, called.
a cross-exam
that grows intense.
Execution would be relief,
A mercy, pardoning
life sentence.

Joyful, I'll braid hangman's noose.
I'll sharpen blade of guillotine.
I'll command the firing squad,
my last request to rest in peace.


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SEA
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1 posted 2000-11-07 11:45 AM


Serenity~

"Joyful, I'll braid hangman's noose.
I'll sharpen blade of guillotine.
I'll command the firing squad,
my last request to rest in peace."

Powerful......this screams just let me be.....loved this write from you.   -SEA

Sunshine
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2 posted 2000-11-07 11:50 AM


Whoa...where in the world did this come from!?  Amazing!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



inot2B
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3 posted 2000-11-07 11:52 AM


You must have been in my head this morning.
This is just how I feel.

Aimster
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4 posted 2000-11-07 12:00 PM


Ser--

damn this is powerful! sorry for language
but it just strikes so hard. excellent
write! take care,

amy  

compassion
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5 posted 2000-11-07 12:04 PM


Oh serenity, A little different style than I'm use to reading from you, but very effective & powerful!! Charged!! I want you to be happy & hope things get better, maybe the others' involved will come to their senses. Love & Hugs
Effigy
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6 posted 2000-11-07 12:04 PM


Bery powerful, yet sad in a happy way.
I don't think that mad sence, but oh well.
I enjoyed this one, thanks for the read.

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-11-07 12:08 PM


*shaking me head*
*there aint nothing she cant write about that it aint so way cool.*

yep...this is exactly how we are...
our own worst enemies...
dont need no body to drag me down..
I can drown just fine on my own..
set my self on fire pretty good too  

ya know...I can handle hearing the voices
its when I start answering them is the problem ...
awesome poem me twin...powerful purging...
ya keep kicking our poetic butts...
and we like it!!!!
so give me more...  
love ya
me

SpitFire
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8 posted 2000-11-07 12:12 PM


~Holding your hand here. K,...ahh, where do I begin? YOU have simply captured something so alive and breathing,...so THERE! Argh. Each time I open you I leave full. Powerful write. Please take care you. *Peace.
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2000-11-07 01:21 PM


SEA---thanks for reading, your a nice lady as well as a talented poet!

Karilea--thank you as well...was just the dregs of a restless night, I think.

inot2be--you have my sympathy. This is not a fun place to be. thanks for reading and hugs.

Amy--thanks to you as well, me friend. You give me lessons of strength daily.

compassion--this is one that finally made it past the "delete" button--a friend said "purge" so there it is...lol. thank you

effigy--I enjoy your work as well. sometimes nothing but darkness will do. thank you.

JM---sent ya a present in your e mail. *wink*

spitfire--I thank you much--your work is kicking butt these days...HUGS

My gratitude to all.

Sven
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10 posted 2000-11-07 01:24 PM


Very powerful my friend. . .

Forceful and full of defiance. . .

----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 2000-11-07 03:38 PM


The reflection is stunning my friend...hugs
CocoBaci
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12 posted 2000-11-07 04:48 PM


Serenity, what powerful thrust of expression you write...

I'm so pleased to have caught a glimpse at this one

Coco

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13 posted 2000-11-07 05:34 PM


you greeted the judge's navel?  

I better re-read that!

Oh! I see! LOL! Would you settle for solitary?  

azure
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14 posted 2000-11-07 09:42 PM


Wow, this one just knocked me over...I'm breathless.  Impressive, sweetheart!

Azure
"I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros

redheart angrybraids
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15 posted 2000-11-08 02:16 AM


howdy-
stund to see such clarity, yet know that i'm reading between the lines you unusual poet of real. how intense the days go by with no door of my own.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

EagleOne
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16 posted 2000-11-08 07:22 AM


This is powerful verse you have penned here, take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

serenity blaze
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17 posted 2000-11-09 12:22 PM


Sven---wish I felt defiant--but then again, I should be more careful what I wish for!

Holly--Hugs back atchya...thanks lady wings!

Coco--thank you as always, for being such a faithful friend to passions, I appreciate your reading very much!

'deer--SOLITARY? Methinks that I already have...sighs and hugs.

azure--I'm continued to be "knocked over" by your work as well. Thank you for popping in m'friend.

redheart--even your replies are poetry--
"how intense the days go by with no door of my own.." Wish I'd thought of that. Hugs you.

Eagle--thank you, m'friend...another day, another step, yes?

Thanx to all!!!

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