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One More Day (for someone special)
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One More Day (for someone special) |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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When I think of all the times we've shared The trips we've made wind in our hair I just can't help but long for one more day When I look back on the love you gave Long nights and memories we made I just can't help but long for one more day When I see the stears up in the sky It reminds of those in your eyes And I just can't help but long for one more day When I hear you say you love me too Makes me happy when I'm feeling blue No, I just can't help but long for one more day ********************************************* The inspiration for this comes from a real life desperate longing, though the words were inspired by the Diamond Rio song "One MOre Day" Last night I had a crazy dream A wish was granted just for me It could be for anything I didn't ask for money Or a mansion in Malibu I simply wished for one more day with you One more day, one more time One more sunset maybe I'd be satisfied But then again I know what it would do Leave me wishing still for one more day with you First thing I'd do is pray for time to crawl I'd unplug the telephone and leave the tv off I'd hold you every second Say a million I love you's That's what I'd do with one more day with you |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
Jeff Jeff Jeff, Going to try to get us a agent SOON!! Huh, huh! This is fine.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This does have a nice melody, ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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djsyours Junior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 16 |
Jeff great writing hope to see more |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Jeffrey- a beautiful and loving write. i like it much. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Jeffrey-What a pleasant and longing wish, very nicely done. |
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poetic_imperfection Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 45 |
Jeff, With these kind of words, how could you ever long for one more day? Great writing and I hope that longing becomes a settled dream. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You've really got the yearning mood set up well in this piece Jeffery and it would make a great song in itself with the right music.......great stuff I really like it! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Sigh ... so much desire and longing wrapped up in this beautiful poem Jeffrey, lovely sentiments! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
One more day One more time One more sunset maybe I'd be satisfied But then again... If you all only knew how very well these words describe the way I'm feeling... One more day....just one more time *big sigh* thank you all for the wonderful replies |
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