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_Dirty business_
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
no hard fee lings in fact no feelings at all a) better detachment a) better way of living days from here i'll wake up numb and transparent the b e st bri ghtest way to c ea se to make sense if i had knees to pray _ i'd think of some other way if i had my own mind _ I'd lay false thoughts in your lap and watch them disapp ear and there are no answers in this head no answers a t all they make it so easy; they swear that she brightens up the room they swear that i'll run out of room and the blood that leaks from the walls will only be my own i willput it in this pen and write till i end ...until i end.. so overflowed at times with listening to myself -whine- and i cant let go of living with - out sound all i am is spread so far theres very little left to go around but the worlds a dirty business we all do dirty business and there will always be - more to go around- no longer afraid of the dark or midday shadows nothing so ridiculously teenage and desperate |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jackal...OMG this is fantastic...so dark and brooding...there are just too many wonderfully deep emotions to pick out one fav so suffice it to say I love the whole thing Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Interesting work from the dark side...I like the format, holds the reader's attention, good work here!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
RESOUNDING APPLAUSE imagine a big room echoing with it. and there are no answers in this head no answers a t all they make it so easy; they swear that she brightens up the room they swear that i'll run out of room and the blood that leaks from the walls will only be my own i willput it in this pen and write till i end ...until i end.. excellent  KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Jackal, I must say that your poem really captured me from beginning to end, loved the style, the content, everything. Excellent! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
no feelings at all a) better detachment a) better way of living days from here i'll wake up numb and transparent the b e st bri ghtest way to c ea se to make sense if i had knees to pray _ i'd think of some other way if i had my own mind ================ and the blood that leaks from the walls will only be my own i willput it in this pen and write till i end ...until i end.. so overflowed at times with listening to myself -whine- and i cant let go of living with - out sound =============== do you know how cool this poem is?? way cool!!! awesome jac....intense and honest..brutally honest. but then your poetry always is... and cool it will be. take care wise poet jm |
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