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A Mirage of Being |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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The moments smear < !signature-->tracing curves of lifeless air a spray of curled melody lingers just beyond a fingertip and I am just a shadow here weighted heavily by the pull of leaden tears. ...A mirage of being... Daylight folds into eve carelessly melding the contrast of things concrete and those only fog into a shroud around my soul. ....I no longer know what’s real... The dusk is caught within me casting sand upon my eyes as blindly I stumble... Life is but a weak, drifting mirage within the confines of me. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
krista i miss reading you and you are soo good great job here |
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The Poetic Plumber Junior Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 38 |
I loved the way the words just flowed along. Great job. Looking forward to more. Roger |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Beautiful poem! I loved your imagery and flow in this poem. "A spray of curled melody" was a great line, I loved it much. And there are countless times when "I no longer know what is real" is my own thought.. And that last verse was great, I loved it! Abrahm Simons "I'm not sick, but I'm not well, and I'm so hot, cause I'm in Hell." - Harvey Danger |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is truly amazing.. "Life is but a weak, drifting mirage within the confines of me.  -SEA |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so much, I'm really glad you liked it. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moments smear tracing curves of lifeless air a spray of curled melody lingers just beyond a fingertip and I am just a shadow here weighted heavily by the pull of leaden tears. ...A mirage of being... =============== K, this is so well written.. you have used such unique and detailed imagery and vocabulary here. this is an exceptional piece from you.. my goodness sweets..you just out do your self with each new one. and this gives me yet another one for my K-collection later-mirage-gator  jm |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I truly like it all krista, but the last three lines were the perfect ending. Much soul throughout... jwesley |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
wow krissa.. beautiful poem...you never cease to amaze me. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Krista, this is simply beautiful ... such a wonderful blend between reality and the unknown ... excellent writing my friend! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Krista, you can write over such a wide range of emotions and you do them all so well... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A wonderfully written poem Krista, fantastic imagery as always especially loved these lines.... Life is but a weak, drifting mirage within the confines of me. loved reading you again Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I thank you all so much, your kindness truly means the world to me. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Great poem Krista. Love the topic. easy to apply to life. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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