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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Forevermore Within granite walls midst row of cheeryblossom tree A fair maiden awaits the knight embraced in dreams Days pass slowly as sunrise casts a beam There waiting by dusty sill she wonders if it could ever be Tears they flow unto her blushing cheeks A knight she yearns for envisioned in dreams The one who dares to reach into her heart And climb the wall built from lack of trust Her soul swiftly rejoices dancing to his song As the vision of he is seen through mist of fog A whisper heard echoes through summer breeze Could this be the knight in her dreams Now journeying past arch of gate Tears they stop and she shyly awaits In front of her knight stands before With gentle touch her heart magically soars Together now, these two souls entwine Into forevermore their hearts beat as one.  Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Oh Coco..this is lovely ..I am putting this in my library..maybe I will dream of a knight to embrace me come dark... ~Wynter's Wish "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i want a girl knight good job coco yuh cocobaci coco baci cocobaci |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Oh yes maidens in yearning for their knights...and knights seeking their fair maidens...when the connection is made Love sweet Love will flow like honey...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This really spoke to me, I love the thought of a white knight, and I bet if every woman admitted it, they all do!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
CoCo* This is beautiful, I adore the weaves of Knights and rescued Maidens...and of couse the Happily Ever After~ Great job~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So where do I sign up to be a knight?  WOW my friend, this is really a beautiful one from you. You make it all sound so inviting. Loved it much. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just beautiful, Coco..love the pictures you painted so softly!!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CocoBaci~ I'm as smitten with the sound of your name as WayOutWalt is .... I do the La Coco Baci ... This is just a lovely write from you. What a pleasant story you've woven. I'm really into everaftering and you did it good ! Love ya', gal~ ~*Marge~* ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
nice work, Coco ... good imagery |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
excellent write!! I love the setting and the structure....very much enjoyed this piece... ethome |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I am sooo delighted that you all like this as my heart smilez N smilez from your kind replies Coco |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I Love this! Wonderfully done!"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Coco~ This surely is something Well penned my friend, great job Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully done, Coco...love the story line! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Wow, Coco! How beautiful this is! Love it!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Coco~ BEAUTIFUL!! You gave me wonderful images to dream by..... -SEA |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...where are all these perfect knights? This is beautiful |
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Highlander Member
since 2000-11-06
Posts 50Dundee, Scotland |
There will always be knights! Lovely verse. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The one who dares to reach into her heart And climb the wall built from lack of trust" Ahhh, what a beautiful tale you've woven Coco, wonderful descriptive imagery, much enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
My thanks once again to all of you! Coco PS: Kit, that is my fav verse you quote as I slipped it in rhyme discreetly to hold on its own! |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Coco...A beautiful tale you have weaved with a fairy tale ending that leaves me smiling. great job, Ron. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I wonder if my knight met your lady immediately after discoursing with Destiny. d'ya think? This was wonderful and a real treat after just posting my Knight's encounter. My thoughts were right there with you. Uncanny... Love is. |
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