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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Arctic winds blow As darkness grows Chills my bones With eerie tones Time stands still Testing my will What to do Here without you Look at the sky Where even moons cry No stars in sight On this wintry night Just me by myself Love on the shelf To be taken in When again I win Snow shall sift Landing in drifts Before my door Visibility is poor Light covers dark Freezing the bark On oak tress Which once held leaves Time marches on Oblivious you're gone Taunting my heart Breaking it apart The pieces fall Against ancient walls You know them well Bordering your cell I didn't see They hid me Who I really am Against them I slam Struggling to be Escaping finally free From the strain Which held my pain Dreams may be renewed Some of them viewed For the first day Things go my way No more torment For this moment My spirit soars Past unlocked doors ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Oh, LW, Liked the ending. Please keep the door open, soaring. Nice read. Marcy |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely written LW..liked alot..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
lone wolf, this is almost an anthem for me today...my heart goes out to you tonite. Be well, take care---HUGS. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Arctic winds blow As darkness grows Chills my bones With eerie tones Time stands still Testing my will What to do Here without you' Whoa. Can I just say, I do understand what you're feeling here, LW!! Wow. Excellent write, my friend!! sp  I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Great poem LW. . . very well done. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ This flows so easily that I would think it just tumbled out of your heart. How releasing it is ... 'For this moment My spirit soars Past unlocked doors' Now watch that spirit soar even higher. Love n' hugs ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
A rockin' poem LW. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Haven't seen you lately Sis....where ya been...oh I see....you been locked away  ....glad your spirit is finally soaring to new heights......you deserve it very muchHope things are well with you Love ya Sis |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
LW~ Nice one my friend, this is incredible and well penned indeed....lots of emotion shown in this ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
LW* The road to unlock those doors seems to be the longest road in our lives...but once they are opened my friend never let them close Excellent writing! Take care of YOU! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You ARE free in verse, Jennifer, and you will be in always! You deserve it! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
Lone Wolf: I really enjoyed this one... excellent! Beacon of Hope! Your guiding light during life's troubling moments. www.yourbeaconofhope.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LW-- poetry in motion. i loved the ryhme and meter but mostly the positive note at the end. i'm a sucker for happy endings  wonderful poem...glad to see ya posting again. take care. amy |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Lone Wolf, I enjoyed this. Amazing, the journey our minds are capable of taking, and you've covered every direction here, I think. Rainydays |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~WooHooHoo!!! LW,...you must know I love this one. Take care of yourself now. Your ending has made me smile. . *Peace you. |
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