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When Two Worlds Collide
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When Two Worlds Collide |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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When Two Worlds Collide I walk silently among you ... Invisible to the reality Of your existence. Jaded by the trials of life, I have chosen to drift in another dimension, Separated from the brutality of your plain. Gazing back through the barrier, I view the torture and torment built By humanity ... The common practices lived harshly While viewed as normality. Protectively, I guard this barricade From forces that threaten to devour The very essence of my being ... The basis of my soul. Sheltered by these walls, Behind the veil of my timid existence, I watch patiently from a'far ... Living this one-sided actuality, I pray for the betterment of man; I dream of the peace and contentment That all should strive willingly for, But alas ... Your reality grows stronger. The fine line between worlds Begins to form a tear ... A fissure in the delicate fabric I have contrived. Propelled by each act of savagery, Your evil gains strength ... I tremble at the brink of sanity, As the howling rage of wretched souls Reverberates through this fragile wall, Shredding the last vestiges of separation. I shrink back against the harsh, unyielding wind As it lays waste the final division, To reveal a gaping, ominous chasm. I try to flee, but it is oblivious to my cries; It suctions back my meager life force, Drawing me screaming and helpless Through this foreboding portal. Spiraling and ravaged, I am dragged against my will Through the tattered and frayed edges That once, unequivocally, divided two universes. Oh please ... Release me ... I do not want your world! /Kit McCallum |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kit, this is powerful, wow. I have been sliding into this abyss myself, feeling like the world intrudes, and continues to get worse and worse, and my pitiful attempts at happiness, or even survival are just that-pitiful. Or did you mean something completely different LOL ? I'm a little depressed lately.. Sandra |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
This is powerful!!! A sensitive soul is sometimes overpowered by the pain without; hang onto your strength; it's all there within you, I can tell that....and please do remember, you are not alone....there are those who will always stand with you!!! Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kit... wow!..my goodness..you went very deep for this one... a very emotive, thought provoking piece of work from you .. and i see your trying your poetic pen at free verse...excellent there are too many superb lines here to single them all out ... powerful will be the word of the day to this one.... later-wisdom-in-your-words-gator jm |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Kit! This is so darkly powerful - such a departure for you. I love it!  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 11-04-2000).] |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh my Kit, WOW ~ What an incredible piece you've given us today...powerful, thought provoking, etc, etc.... Great read! Bonnie |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kit - your heart has been opened, perhaps sad at times, perhaps happy at others. A very meaningful and powerful writing from you. Bill |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ A depth of searching that brings dimension to the soul. We either implode or explode on collision - decisions - decisions - decisions. Deeply you've begun the search. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kit, this is so amazing, such power, and such a deep meaning. Remember, that all you have to do is ask for help and it will there. A case of reach out and touch, because alone we might crumble, but together we stand. Look after yourself, what was that line in your poem I loved so much, ahhh! 'hold tight my heart it's always darkest before the dawn' Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kit~ Such powerful emotions from deep within, you have penned this so wonderfully...welled penned my friend and we all hear you  winged ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
this is such an emotionally dark poem. really has to power to set one's mind in motion. excellent read. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, I thought I had seen many sides of you but this is a new one on me...is there nothing you don't do well????? great feelings expressed here..... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fabulous writing, Kit! Very well expressed! Denise |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Sandra: You pretty much rapped it up Sandra, although there are several facets to my mindset, you've summarized it well ... thank you for being so understanding. ~Pepper: Sometimes, we have to stand on our own Pepper, and those are the most difficult moments, though I always appreciate my friends .... thank you. ~JanetMarie: You know, your words mean so much to me JM ... I love you for your caring and warm heart, you're very much appreciated. Thank you ~Sharon: This is not such a departure for me Sharon, it's just not a side I share very often, though I'm very grateful you enjoyed. ~Bonnie: Thanks so much for your understanding words Bonnie ... I so very much appreciate your thoughts. ~Bill: Opened and lying bare across the page ... this was a tough one Bill, thank you for being so sweet. ~Marge: Dear Marge, I've been searching so long ... I implode over and over ... some day I fear the EX-plosion .. thank you for being so astute. ~Marsha: Ahhh, you've pulled two of my recent poems together Marsha ... "hold tight my heart" indeed. I do try, though I find life rather strangulating at times, thank you for your wisdom. ~Tracie: Thank you so much for the hugs Tracie ... I could use them tonight, more so than others, I'm having a tough night unfortunately. I'm sure it will pass eventually. ~Ron: I'm so glad it gave some thought provocation Ron ... it's how I talk to myself, and only hope I somehow listen. Thank you. ~Balladeer: Thank you for helping me smile Michael ... your warm thoughts always set my mind in a beautiful place, thank you, I needed that, and am so very grateful. ~Denise: Thanks so much Denise ... I hoped it came across well, and I appreciate your thoughts. Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Kit, WOW!! Powerful!! I am in awe of this piece. Great, great write. Enjoyed. Marcy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Potent stuff here, Kit... We do indeed protect ourselves from the undesirable.. You've expressed yourself beautifully...  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Kit* I knew when I began reading this I was going to walk away in awe of your talent...I was correct! This is Excellent!!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
please release me let me go yuh i likes this yuh yuh |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
How does one spend eternity behind a blockade? ... alone ... very sad Kit, with a touch of forlorn you wrote this well |
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Highlander Member
since 2000-11-06
Posts 50Dundee, Scotland |
I have been reading many poems today, and this is quite enchanting. From a lovely pen, I'm sure. |
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