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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-09-27 12:33 PM



I could extol your beauty
All your luscious curves
Or your body's fleetness
How my attention swerves

I could rave about how sudden
The plains dip into valleys
Or rise to mounds of sweetness
Where my tongue wants to sally

I could moan about chemistry
That melts us like hot wax
Bringing forth the nectar
And our fever to the max

But no such words can carry
The weight of meaning in your eyes
Or why I chose to tarry
Near your door plying my sighs

For I find in your sincerity
The truth I can depend on
In your thoughts a total honesty
I could go on and on

Analyzing to the essence
It's a comfort level thing
When I'm with you feel no stresses
It's serenity you bring



~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

© Copyright 2000 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
seraphin
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1 posted 2000-09-27 12:39 PM


Again, wonderful. Pure, sensual, alluring...just wonderful.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2000-09-27 12:41 PM


Absolutely lovely!  
SpitFire
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3 posted 2000-09-27 12:44 PM


~WY,...comes true and tender and so from within and all said with much class. Truly beautiful. Take care of you. *Peace.
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2000-09-27 04:26 AM


(ahem) ....  Do ya mind if I take this one personally?  (serenity hugs herself)

You are a lovely, lovely, man...need I say more?

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2000-09-27 04:38 AM


serenity, Please share a little
I loved it, too. Pretty please?

Bill, I liked the end of this poem. I am big in sincerity as well as serenity

Kethry
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6 posted 2000-09-27 05:48 AM


Kethry sighs a big sigh *sigh* well done sir knight. I takes my hat off two ya.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Nan
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7 posted 2000-09-27 07:40 AM


You do dance quite well poetically, my friend..
Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-09-27 07:55 AM


there are so many cool lines in this poem ...
I just had to smile ...

===========================
I could extol your beauty
All your luscious curves
Or your body's fleetness
How my attention swerves
=========================
Or rise to mounds of sweetness
Where my tongue wants to sally

I could moan about chemistry
That melts us like hot wax
Bringing forth the nectar
And our fever to the max
==========================
Or why I chose to tarry
Near your door plying my sighs
==================

Analyzing to the essence
It's a comfort level thing
When I'm with you feel no stresses
It's serenity you bring
==================

this is such a cool poem...
its rhyme is like melted butter
the cadence is as well
but its the layed back
no so subtle sensuality of it mixed with
the vocab and phrasing ...
it all works together to make for a sincere
genuine COOL poem ...
(did I mention how cool it is)   LOL
my vocabulary hasnt had its coffee yet...
forgive the lack of poetic proper words..
just know i dig this poem   "sally" on now *smile*
later-like the way you write gator
jm



Wilfred Yeats
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9 posted 2000-09-27 09:16 AM


Seraphin-

I'm so pleased you liked - your poetry pleases me just as much

Dark Angel-

Not half as lovely as your poetry or your picture Thank you

Spitfire -

I'm not always so "classy" - sometimes my emotions get the better of me ~G~ - Thank you

Serenity-

I must confess _ I began this poem some time before  I joined this forum - so - I didn't even know (of) you then - but by all means - take it - and you too are lovely ~S~ Thank you for the too kind words

Liz -

Thank you for giving me the 'seed' (title) for my next poem (Sincerity) I hope I do it justice. (and I agree - sincerity is a priority word with me as well) Thank you again  

Kethry-

So - I need another laugh - right? but I got the 'sigh' Ok - I'll work on it ~G~
Thank you

Nan-

I'm just corny enough to admit one of my favorite songs has the lines: "Could I have this dance - for the rest of my life ..."
Thanks Nan

Janet Marie-

As you read me and speak well of my words - I too read and learn of you - I believe you and Green Eyes have something in common - both having lost a love you treasure the memory of. You may not have anything else to share, but a reading of her poetry may please you (She and I are friends and go back a couple years to another forum)
Thank You I'll try to remain kewl as I sally forth ~G~

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2000-09-27 09:21 AM


HUMOR ME!!!WILFRED!!!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
11 posted 2000-09-27 09:24 AM


Now he is the one to make them all swoon and melt.  Absolutely superb verse my friend.  I do so enjoy reading your creations. Talent in abundance.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2000-09-27 09:45 AM


now see it is as I say
as serenity came to play
dont you see her swooning
dreaming of someday spooning

oooopppppssss

grandiloquent
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13 posted 2000-09-27 11:57 AM


mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm ...
Oh, I love this. What a wonderful way to start my day -- with a warm, little dancing feeling in my stomach.
Beautiful, sensual, and so sweet.
Billy, all sonnets, odes, and poems of ardor are your crowning talent... but this is my very favorite. Bravo.


serenity blaze
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14 posted 2000-09-27 12:17 PM


Serenity...just a dream of chances
as you dare
the stance of trances--
serenity--a moment's passing.....
serene to be
a lifetime, laughing.....
(she whispers)
and you feel so real...
bemoaning moment,
makes you feel
everything you've known...

*wink*

Martie
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15 posted 2000-09-27 01:42 PM


This poem is wonderful, Bill...especially like the last two Stanzas!
Wilfred Yeats
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16 posted 2000-09-27 03:12 PM


Serenity -

I'm Blessed with 3 Replies.  Woo Hoo  
for such munificance I'll humor you any time!
Your poetry is beautiful and deserves its own posting. - but let me add you don't want to feel ALL I'm feeling (I'm 68 ~G~)

Mark-

Your words are always a lift to my spirits - as for serenity - I've seen neither Tea nor Table   but you've made me smile

Marcie/grandiloquent-

Now when one of your talent compliments me - I'm doubly humbled - THank you sooo much

Martie-

well the last two verses HAD to be there - they address the title of the poem  
but based on your comments I now know for sure where I should go with future efforts.
(and you know - how much I appreciate your replies and your posts)


~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder

Corinne
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state of confusion
17 posted 2000-09-27 03:41 PM


Where my tongue wants to sally - love this line!  A very sensuous and sweet poem!

Corinne

serenity blaze
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18 posted 2000-09-27 04:05 PM


Four replies now...grin...and 68?  no prob...Wils...I like a man that's grateful..
*wink* and a nudge...well done, m'friend.

RAM
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19 posted 2000-09-27 04:34 PM


this is lovely, WY

this reminds me somewhat of some sonnets -- not in form, since the form is definitely not  a sonnet form, but in the tradition of posing a task/problem/hypothesis in the begining with the "I could...." stanzas, and then presenting a resolution of sorts with the rest of the poem (like, from "but..." on down) hmmmmmmm    not sure I'm making sense  LOL


Wilfred Yeats
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20 posted 2000-09-27 08:54 PM


I'm not used to being deluged with replies - as this piece of mine seems to have engendered -

you three -

I'll sally on - I'm a python fan too
are you suggesting a sonnet frm rewrite? I'm intrigued - and may try it - I DO see what you mean

and thank you all  

Sunshine
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21 posted 2000-09-28 10:09 AM


is it ok if I say that sometimes I'm rendered speechless, and leave it at that?
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22 posted 2000-09-28 01:21 PM


oh dear lord, just what i needed to see after being under the weather along with other things...*S*  you have a way with words like no other....

GE

Paula Finn
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23 posted 2000-10-13 03:27 PM


Sigh...lost in you again...I may not have the words these other ladies do...but you have to know just what it is you do to me.
Wilfred Yeats
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24 posted 2000-10-13 06:14 PM


I owe an apology to Sunshine and green eyes - and thanks to Paula for flagging my attention here -

Karilea -
You - at a loss for words - seems an incomprehensible combination

Green Eyes-
LC - I sincerely hope you're feeling better -woo hoo  

Paula - thank you thank you thank you ~S~

redheart angrybraids
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25 posted 2000-11-08 02:34 AM


this you know a heart throbber, i love your old words, thank you kindly for the read. as well.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

tracie66
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26 posted 2000-11-08 04:06 AM


Oh Wilfred this is superb   you know you coulda got yaself inta loads of trouble me friend  
Great write Wil
~HUG~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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