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| Open Poetry #10 |
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Serenity |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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I could extol your beauty All your luscious curves Or your body's fleetness How my attention swerves I could rave about how sudden The plains dip into valleys Or rise to mounds of sweetness Where my tongue wants to sally I could moan about chemistry That melts us like hot wax Bringing forth the nectar And our fever to the max But no such words can carry The weight of meaning in your eyes Or why I chose to tarry Near your door plying my sighs For I find in your sincerity The truth I can depend on In your thoughts a total honesty I could go on and on Analyzing to the essence It's a comfort level thing When I'm with you feel no stresses It's serenity you bring ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Again, wonderful. Pure, sensual, alluring...just wonderful. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely lovely!  |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~WY,...comes true and tender and so from within and all said with much class. Truly beautiful. Take care of you. *Peace. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
(ahem) .... Do ya mind if I take this one personally? (serenity hugs herself) You are a lovely, lovely, man...need I say more? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
serenity, Please share a little I loved it, too. Pretty please? Bill, I liked the end of this poem. I am big in sincerity as well as serenity |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kethry sighs a big sigh *sigh* well done sir knight. I takes my hat off two ya. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You do dance quite well poetically, my friend..  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
there are so many cool lines in this poem ... I just had to smile ... =========================== I could extol your beauty All your luscious curves Or your body's fleetness How my attention swerves ========================= Or rise to mounds of sweetness Where my tongue wants to sally I could moan about chemistry That melts us like hot wax Bringing forth the nectar And our fever to the max ========================== Or why I chose to tarry Near your door plying my sighs ================== Analyzing to the essence It's a comfort level thing When I'm with you feel no stresses It's serenity you bring ================== this is such a cool poem... its rhyme is like melted butter the cadence is as well but its the layed back no so subtle sensuality of it mixed with the vocab and phrasing ... it all works together to make for a sincere genuine COOL poem ... (did I mention how cool it is) LOLmy vocabulary hasnt had its coffee yet... forgive the lack of poetic proper words.. just know i dig this poem  "sally" on now *smile*later-like the way you write gator jm |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Seraphin- I'm so pleased you liked - your poetry pleases me just as much Dark Angel- Not half as lovely as your poetry or your picture Thank you Spitfire - I'm not always so "classy" - sometimes my emotions get the better of me ~G~ - Thank you Serenity- I must confess _ I began this poem some time before I joined this forum - so - I didn't even know (of) you then - but by all means - take it - and you too are lovely ~S~ Thank you for the too kind words Liz - Thank you for giving me the 'seed' (title) for my next poem (Sincerity) I hope I do it justice. (and I agree - sincerity is a priority word with me as well) Thank you again Kethry- So - I need another laugh - right? but I got the 'sigh' Ok - I'll work on it ~G~ Thank you Nan- I'm just corny enough to admit one of my favorite songs has the lines: "Could I have this dance - for the rest of my life ..." Thanks Nan Janet Marie- As you read me and speak well of my words - I too read and learn of you - I believe you and Green Eyes have something in common - both having lost a love you treasure the memory of. You may not have anything else to share, but a reading of her poetry may please you (She and I are friends and go back a couple years to another forum) Thank You I'll try to remain kewl as I sally forth ~G~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
HUMOR ME!!!WILFRED!!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now he is the one to make them all swoon and melt. Absolutely superb verse my friend. I do so enjoy reading your creations. Talent in abundance. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
now see it is as I say as serenity came to play dont you see her swooning dreaming of someday spooning    oooopppppssss |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm ... Oh, I love this. What a wonderful way to start my day -- with a warm, little dancing feeling in my stomach. Beautiful, sensual, and so sweet. Billy, all sonnets, odes, and poems of ardor are your crowning talent... but this is my very favorite. Bravo. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Serenity...just a dream of chances as you dare the stance of trances-- serenity--a moment's passing..... serene to be a lifetime, laughing..... (she whispers) and you feel so real... bemoaning moment, makes you feel everything you've known... *wink* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poem is wonderful, Bill...especially like the last two Stanzas! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Serenity - I'm Blessed with 3 Replies. Woo Hoo for such munificance I'll humor you any time! Your poetry is beautiful and deserves its own posting. - but let me add you don't want to feel ALL I'm feeling (I'm 68 ~G~) Mark- Your words are always a lift to my spirits - as for serenity - I've seen neither Tea nor Table but you've made me smile Marcie/grandiloquent- Now when one of your talent compliments me - I'm doubly humbled - THank you sooo much Martie- well the last two verses HAD to be there - they address the title of the poem but based on your comments I now know for sure where I should go with future efforts. (and you know - how much I appreciate your replies and your posts) ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Where my tongue wants to sally - love this line! A very sensuous and sweet poem! Corinne |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Four replies now...grin...and 68? no prob...Wils...I like a man that's grateful.. *wink* and a nudge...well done, m'friend. |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
this is lovely, WY this reminds me somewhat of some sonnets -- not in form, since the form is definitely not a sonnet form, but in the tradition of posing a task/problem/hypothesis in the begining with the "I could...." stanzas, and then presenting a resolution of sorts with the rest of the poem (like, from "but..." on down) hmmmmmmm not sure I'm making sense LOL |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm not used to being deluged with replies - as this piece of mine seems to have engendered - you three - I'll sally on - I'm a python fan too are you suggesting a sonnet frm rewrite? I'm intrigued - and may try it - I DO see what you mean and thank you all |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
is it ok if I say that sometimes I'm rendered speechless, and leave it at that? |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
oh dear lord, just what i needed to see after being under the weather along with other things...*S* you have a way with words like no other.... GE |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...lost in you again...I may not have the words these other ladies do...but you have to know just what it is you do to me. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I owe an apology to Sunshine and green eyes - and thanks to Paula for flagging my attention here - Karilea - You - at a loss for words - seems an incomprehensible combination Green Eyes- LC - I sincerely hope you're feeling better -woo hoo Paula - thank you thank you thank you ~S~ |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this you know a heart throbber, i love your old words, thank you kindly for the read. as well. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Wilfred this is superb you know you coulda got yaself inta loads of trouble me friend Great write Wil ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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