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Sunrise Reflections - Terzanelle
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Sunrise Reflections - Terzanelle |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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I wrote this last spring on a challenge If you like villanelle - you might li.ke this too Sunrise Reflections - Terzanelle Sunrise earlier with advent of spring After six color shows on horizon And as it was set the alarm did ring Stark black against the oncoming dawn New life not yet apparent in the trees After six color shows on horizon Their spidery webs leaves they wait to don Wisps of cloud jagged rips in pale turquoise New life not yet apparent in the trees By marshland pools young fishing boys Reflecting pale pink from yet unseen sun Wisps of cloud jagged rips in pale turquoise Mirroring the new day snapped with flash-gun A goose vee added to the reflection Reflecting pale pink from yet unseen sun After six color shows on horizon [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely billy..i must of wrote mine at the same time you wrote yours..i only wrote one.. enjoyed..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
This is the only one I wrote too - thanks Victoria |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wil these are fantastic...truly. I just read your villanelle ... and then this and compared the structure and rhyme schemes superb poetry from you sir... and you show your poets talent and capabilies well. thanks for the lessons in poetry today... the imagery on both this and the villanelle is excellent. later-teach-me-new-poetry-gator  jm |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the imagery is wonderful...wonderful... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very beautiful, my friend! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
to one and all here too - I goofed in the other drection on this - one verse short (double blush) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
No need to blush, my friend... expanded or truncated, your work is still great..  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautiful visions Excellent! (Now I've got to look up"terzenelle") Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Nan- Liz - and everyone - Thank you all for your kind responses - I'm my own worst critic I guess- I will attempt these forms again and try to do it 'correctly' this time. and Liz- if you can't fine Terznelle elsewhere try http://woods.bianca.com/shacklet/the_biki/repeat.html |
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