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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-09-26 10:49 PM

Spinning Human Spread

she was alive in there,
on walls of winter red, on
tiles fallen, on spinning human spread.
she was dancing there,
on flames in constant beat, on
tip toes, and raging fire's heat.
she was screaming there,
in voices fallen dead, in
ticking box, and inside my head.
she was alive in there,
on walls of winter red, on
tiles fallen, on spinning human spread.

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

1 posted 2000-09-26 10:58 PM

i loved the wording in this poem so much, the repetition was pefect, this was excellent, in reminds me of oldfashioned.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

2 posted 2000-09-26 11:02 PM

i loved the wording in this poem so much, the repetition was pefect, this was excellent, in reminds me of oldfashioned.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-09-26 11:54 PM

SpitFire,

Hey you!!! So nice to see you posting here my friend. I can see your confusion in this one, but I know she is still alive in there . . . just have to have faith. You are in my thoughts. ***HUGS***

Lone Wolf

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2000-09-27 02:56 AM

spitfire~
Hi little one

great piece of writings, I wonder if you need a hug

Oh well even if you don't I'm giving you one anyway *HUG*

Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

5 posted 2000-09-27 06:21 AM

I sense frustration and confusion in this one, great writing. Hugs all round, take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

6 posted 2000-09-27 09:38 AM

I join the others in big warm group hugs you've got to know you're in a place of loving friends - I 'felt' this poem to my core. well done

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-09-27 11:38 AM

~Redheart, thank you for stopping in and replying with all you did. I enjoyed your comment. Take care.
~LW, you are so kind. So kind. Thank you gurl.
~Tracie, thank you for visiting my words and for the offering of yours. You sweet thang.
~Eagle, yeah, a bit. Thank you for reading me and taking the time.
~Wilfred, so nice to have you visit me, and thank you for feeling it.
~AND thank you all for the group hugs! *Peace all.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2000-09-27 12:12 PM

Hi you, this has a bit of a stressed tone to it. I feel the same so often. Great writing, and may I join in the group hug?
Sandra

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