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Sorrow's Bite (apologize for the length)
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Sorrow's Bite (apologize for the length) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Leave not a stone to mark this site, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Witness not pain's pantomime, unwanted pallor lost in sands of shifting time, for I have felt, yes, I have felt. Trailing brambles, cormorants, as starving beggar, mendicants, who stand before all that I covet, never looking, never seeing, no light from forth heaven's sky illuminates, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Upon hot breathless wind, beyond a dying sun, knowing not if day is done, pillared forest aisles devoid of burning beakers pouring forth of Sol, heeding not of sorrow's call, for I have felt, yes, I have felt. Spanning breadth of river's depth, bridging not words yet unwritten, unknown sounds of sorrow bitten, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Alone I stand with outstretched limb, whorling leaves and fragile stem, no hawk nor dove, may haunt my breast, amid deep roots in mystic quest, for I have felt, yes, I have felt. I now wait for night's cruel fate, fingers bleeding, in pain pleading, sorrow's call in final fall, fearing not honed axes thrust, mourn no more from dust to dust, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Unbroken silence of the night, waveless, tideless, Luna's light, brooding over all living things, hushing even, cicada's wings, ensconced in chill as stillness wanes, deserted chasm, darkness reigns in echo of night's silent spasm, staring blankly, sterile features of uninhabited lair, carried lower, lower, to numb's despair, for I have felt, yes, I have felt. Confronted by no mortal being, consciousness of death unseeing, whilst sneak away on noisless feet, Mesistopheles, in life's defeat. I stand above cold pauper's grave as darkness calls to soul enslave, Shrouded chambers, fingers bleed, dark spirits stalk, hell hath decreed, for I have felt, yes, for I have felt. Man's unperverted ethereal mask, erected by death's loathesome lust, mournful soul, by evil crushed, touched upon by lifeless breath, stand face to face with sin and death, in the darkness of the night, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Dark shadow's rest, on bier and vault, ceding not to pain's exalt, adrift on sea of trust betrayed, attempt not seige nor escalade, scourged by scorpions, midst gulfs of space, For I know thee as know my face, eschew the sufferers to borrow, as feel the sting of endless sorrow, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite, sorrow of my sorrow, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. yes, I have felt. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-04-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mike, Wow! It didn't seem to be too long and it left me reading to the end and wanting more. Heady poetry and the images it created ... Wow! Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I now wait for night's cruel fate, fingers bleeding, in pain pleading, sorrow's call in final fall, fearing not honed axes thrust, mourn no more from dust to dust, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite. Unbroken silence of the night, waveless, tideless, Luna's light, brooding over all living things, hushing even, cicada's wings, ensconced in chill as stillness wanes, deserted chasm, darkness reigns in echo of night's silent spasm, staring blankly, sterile features of uninhabited lair, carried lower, lower, to numb's despair, for I have felt, yes, I have felt. Confronted by no mortal being, consciousness of death unseeing, whilst sneak away on noisless feet, Mesistopheles, in life's defeat. =========== why in the name of poetry would you apologize for this... my goodness this is exceptional .. astonishing poetry Mike.. the cadence...the vocabulary-which by the way is SO COOL!!!! the repetion of those lines made it even more cool... the vivid imagery, the constant flow of verbage... the poetic cliches' penned so perfectly that the were no longer cliche' I could go on and on ... this one goes in my file to read many more times to take it all in and do it justice... you are a poet sir... take care jm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Mike. Fabulous writing. Denise |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Never apologize for writing this spectacular Mike...the feelings were honest and so raw... the length was un-noticed, once I dove in there was no coming to the surface for air until the last word had been read...excellent work~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--You know how much I admire your writing...no??? Well, I do. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Kethry... appreciate the wow... thanks for the reply. Janet Marie... I have been accused of a constant flow of verbage before..*smile* seriously, thank you so much for the extemely gracious reply. Denise...danke for my favorite legal assistant type person.. Butterflies... thank you for the very kind reply... Martie... you are indeed a jewel... |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
holycow!!! this is an unbelievable poem my sis (JM)told me to make sure i read this one and i am so glad she did. i dont think ive ever read such a cool and well written poem before i will read it several times before my blonde mind can absorb it all but it will be my pleasure thanks to jan for pointing it out to me trisha my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing. Take care, Rainydays |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing. Take care, Rainydays |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
You have an acceptional piece of poetry here. I must apologize to YOU for not reading it sooner. Wonderful writing. Take care, Rainydays |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Gee, I must have REALLY liked it!! LOL! (I did, actually, but don't know how I said it three times)  Rainy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ You set the hook and slowly reeled me in. This one's a keeper ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Man's unperverted ethereal mask, erected by death's loathesome lust, mournful soul, by evil crushed, touched upon by lifeless breath, stand face to face with sin and death, in the darkness of the night, for I have felt, yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite." Wonderful Mike! This had me absorbed in totality from beginning to end. Do not apologize for the length ... for I wish it had continued further! An excellent, thought-provoking read, loved it! Best wishes, /Kit |
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