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watch the weather, it’s going to storm............
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Sunshine
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watch the weather, it’s going to storm they say that it is going to storm they say we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever they say that it is going to howl but it won’t match the ravage in my heart they say its going to rain and pour but not like this tornado that’s torn apart what was left within me, and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time they say there is a tempest a’blowing my heart sure knows this to be true you can hear it in the old cock’s crowing as the skies get dark and lose the blue and that tornado, well it snuck in tight sucked me up and drew in the light ravaged and savaged and threw me around and then it as suddenly let me down what was left within me and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time now I keep a careful eye on the stormy day never will I again let it have it’s way for I will draw behind me that old cellar door and await the ceasing of the terrible roar they say that it is going to storm they say we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever what was left within me and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--A wonderfully done poem...what a storm! When one like that passes through your heart you best duck and cover...made me worry about you some...hugs! |
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Sunshine
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Martie, a wonderful from you is worth its weight in gold...and never worry about me, I just happen to be partial to country music... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is amazing, so well constructed, this form is so good for you. Utterly perfect, I can see the storm now, and that is true, we've had nothing but really bad storms here for ever. (Okay that is an exageration, just half of ever.) Take care of yourself love Mushy Marsha  Be good  but not too good Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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Marsha, well then, I will continue to work on my "form"...but in the meantime, thanks for coming in to read... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hoping that the storm subsides soon. . . Wonderful poem. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
After the storm comes the rainbow  Great job of expressing those emotions!!!Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Karilea, your "form" looks great from here....may I promise sunny days?? |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Sven, 'tis the season for storms... Peppermint, thank you for reading... 'Deer...you may promise anything... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea- this is powerful - poetic - and if I may repeat martie's choice of words: 'wonderful'. I'd go so far as to say specacular. (and you have me in a 'stormy' mood ) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats, anything that Martie says goes twice as far with me...she is a wonderful person... thank you so much for your words...indeed, storms are a'rumbling... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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