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A Man - ChallengePDV
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A Man - ChallengePDV |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
In response to a challenge made by PDV this is an attempt to address a subject in the viewpoint of the "Opposite Sex" A MAN... There was a day your face mirrored sunset's grace There was a time your voice whispered so divine There was a heart that once beated for his wife There was a mind that only of you were its thoughts There was a soul that once embraced you as its mate There was a body that passionately for you it ached There was a boy who knew you were his every need There is now a man who walks away...confused  Coco |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
well done coco...many men do end up confused and wanting to seek something other than what they have...I saw a good friend of mine lose everything...his business...his wife and kids...because he thought a younger woman would make him feel younger...well he lost her too...The grass is never greener on the other side of the fence...just looks that way cause you haven't had to pull the weeds out of it yet< !signature--> Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox [This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ron, I thank you for your honesty and taking a moment to peak at this one! Smiles2U Coco |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There was a soul that once embraced you as its mate There was a body that passionately for you it ached There was a boy who knew you were his every need There is now a man who walks away...confused ================== very cool poem Coco... you packed a lot of emotion in a few well chosen lines... and the impact of the last line is perfect excellent repsonse to the challenge.. best of all nice to have a post from you  jm |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Good job! I was discussing male confusion with someone not too long ago. I think a lot of women give out mixed signals..they want a man to be 'manly' but sensitive. Then when he shows sensitivity, they want manliness! Geesh!!! Honesty is the best policy!  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Aw.....stop picking on us! We're sensitive and caring......however, I get your point and it is well taken...good work!!....take care... ethome |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Coco, another good write from a man's point of view. It seems the guys are a bit slow off the mark. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Coco~ Great write my friend, you expressed yourself clearly here...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Coco, this is such a great poem, really amazing. Bravo Take care Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Coco...you have devine insight! I would say this was a challenge well met. Great writing!! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Coco~ this is fantastic! I'm no guy, but I think you did an excellent job here....... -SEA |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
been there - felt that way - took years of sensitivity study - (still working ) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Poet Friends... you are all just too sweet. Sometimes the challenges all of you come up with on screen just teases a reader so pleasantly one can't resist... even mOi! Bottom line... MEN ya can't live without em so we best learn how to love em! Hugs2AllOfU Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Coci.. excellent poem, when it comes to love men and women tend to see things differently... part of the attraction I guess. WOnderfully written poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey! I'm sensitive. . .and I'll beat up anyone that thinks otherwise!! LOL  Great poem Coco. . . the signals continue to need decoding. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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