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One Day When I Discover
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One Day When I Discover |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
One Day When I Discover One day when I discover The stars have grown old And you're no longer my lover Life is just so very cold Life is just so very cold Winter numbs my waning breath The stars have grown dim And you're no longer in my bed Night is my silent sin Night is my silent sin Frail in my intagliated robe The stars have grown hard And you're no longer near to hold Dreams are tears of a poet bard Dreams are tears of a poet bard Death is the exit of a failed life The stars have grown black And you're no longer my sweet wife If I could turn this cursed clock back If I could turn this cursed clock back One day when I discover, you left me for another. James Parker Haley Nov 2, 2000.. … cause the old black rum's got a hold on me will I live for another day…… (Great Big Sea) [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Parker you just got to like The Great Big Sea.....aside from that I loved the poem it's a great summation of the events of life as they could be....write on Canuck!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is very sad, and honest, very good expression of despair, which is sometimes only brought out in our words "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Frail in my intagliated robe The stars have grown hard And you're no longer near to hold Dreams are tears of a poet bard Dreams are tears of a poet bard Death is the exit of a failed life The stars have grown black And you're no longer my sweet wife If I could turn this cursed clock back If I could turn this cursed clock back ==================== while this is a sadder, darker than usual poem from you P-man ...it is a very cool poem.. the repetion makes its cadence perfect and the melancholy of it is accented well with the common thread of the stars images. >Frail in my intagliated robe The stars have grown hard> very cool line is this!!!!! VERY you've been studing the masters again... and learning very well. excellent writing p-man ...indeed another one for my pedestal collection  later-love-when-you-play-with-poetry-gator me |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
it's always sad to loss love ....(((warm hugs))) and the rum work only for a little while, hope you will feel better soon. Charisma |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Carpe diem, Park, carpe diem. Cor |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Parker, you leave me speechless....and that in itself is true veneration for your abilities as a poet... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Pass the rum, me friend, and I'll help you through your stuper...willingly. Enjoyed the read. jwesley |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hello Handsome~ this is sad.....I really enjoyed it....  -SEA |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, thanks and yeah I love that band... I was listening to them and they put me in a strange mood.... must be a rum memory flashback... lol Wish I had some Newfie Screech Rum. Kathleen, thank you sweet Irish lady... Brown-eye's, thank you my sweet friend... I needed a word and that one was just begging me... hey I don't get alot of begging lately. Charisma, thank you... you got something else to take my mind off things... sorry, just the rum talking... hic!Corinne, my Irish sweet heart thank you. Sunshine, speechless.... well heck have some of this rum... i'll get ya talking lady. jwesley, here ye go my friend... misery loves company... SEA, thank you, stay awhile.... here take a swig and maybe you'll enjoy my next couple of pick up lines... Parker...... I drank sexteen dollars for the price of one Trying to find the courage to talk to one I ask her for dance, not a second glance my night had just begun, Well I drink to the father of the holy ghost I'm kneeling at the alter of my nightly post So I'll raise a glass not the first or last come join me in this toast. Because thee old black rum's got a hold on me like a dog wrapped round my leg And thee old black rum's got a hold on me will I live for another day Hey, will I live for another day.... "The Old Black Rum.... by The Great Big Sea" downloadable from your nearest Napster radio station... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hey Handsome~ I'll dance with you baby -SEA |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James, I like this new style you use here. Change can be good. Isn't it just amazing what Napster can inspire!  And to think that all this time, I have been using realjukebox! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
SEA, into my arms then, and we'll dance oblivious to the world. Marina, thanks... yes music is good for the inspirations. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ah sweet poet...I could hear you whispering this to the stars in the night sky...such a soft and tender weave...I'm wondering if you get off that pedestal to write or if you sit up there all day long!! Excellent writing Parker...always a pleasure to read~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
awesome write parker..i'm with sea on that speechless thing...  and the pedastal question--so you sit up there all the time? be careful you dont fall off--that rum drinkin on a pedastal could be detramental to your pretty face...  hugs awesome poet dg"i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Butterflies, no I just get up there to get some sun... tan naked you know... best way. dg, maybe you should come up here there's always room for a sweet poet, just incase I need someone to hold onto. Parker |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Parker...I want in on this dancing gig..I'll even sing for you...make music all our own...especially after some of that rum |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Parker- wow...this is wonderful! i'm loving this. awesome write my puppy...i mean poet friend...lol hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Paula, thank you.... sounds good to this dancing fool... Vicky, thank you my kitten.... Parker  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow...Parker--what beautiful poetry falls from your intagliated robe (I had to look that one up and still couldn't find the meaning...did you make it up?) Superb writing!!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, thank you.... no that word means carved in hard surface... as time would carve its features into me as I grow old and hard to the world from this pain.... I guess... Ok, this is not about who I am today, I just let the poem develope from some certain observations of life love and relationships than end this way.. Parker |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
..lookin for steps up to the top of that pedastal...hey! let down your hair will ya..lol or..maybe you just floated up there...  i'll find a way--gotta get to ya while the gettins good!  hugs |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg, need some help, grab me and climb on. |
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