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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Forgotten times of crystal chimes, ...soft hush of spring's first rain, Paths not taken, now forsaken, ...sweet sorrows without pain, As wisps of air, tease ebon hair, ...rememberance of thee, Of flowing streams and flowered dreams, ...of love not meant to be, Evening's calm, love's soothing balm, ...of joy once known to me, Cool autumn breeze, as summer flees, ...farewell, thy memory, Night's sailing ships, soft satin lips, ...no more a new day's dawn, Velvet petals, tarnished metals, ...sweet scent of rose now gone, Call of the loon, a hunter's moon, ...whispers on the wind, Words not spoken, promise broken, ...heartaches never end, Upon a star, I gaze afar, ...upon an angel's face, Foevermore, means nevermore, ...forever elfin grace, Forgotten times of crystal chimes, ...awakened from their sleep, For in mine heart, shall never part, ...forever will thy keep. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
so lovely Mike...enjoyed..  nicely penned~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mike* I'm blown away...this is so beautiful...it played just like a wind chime of memories and tenderness woven together in a stunning piece of poetry~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is exquisite, Mike! So very beautifully done! Nice to see you again! Denise |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Fantastic! Fluid in the reading. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Your words read musically...beautifully done. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Your words read musically...beautifully done. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Forgotten times of crystal chimes, ...soft hush of spring's first rain, Paths not taken, now forsaken, ...sweet sorrows without pain, As wisps of air, tease ebon hair, ...rememberance of thee, Of flowing streams and flowered dreams, ...of love not meant to be, Evening's calm, love's soothing balm, ...of joy once known to me, Cool autumn breeze, as summer flees, ...farewell, thy memory, Night's sailing ships, soft satin lips, ...no more a new day's dawn, Velvet petals, tarnished metals, ...sweet scent of rose now gone, =============== Mike...as always from your pen ... enchanting and exquisite imagery kissed in your gift of cadence of rhyme... superb...and another one for my library collection jm jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
A very hauntingly romantic poem here! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all very much for reading and enjoying my poetry. Your replies are appreciated. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is exquisite, Mike! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is an excellent poetic work...well done my friend!!...I enjoyed every line....take care.....ethome.... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! you have packed so much feeling into your words. I am in awe! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Martie, ethome, and Eagle One.. thank you for the kind replies... glad you enjoyed. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
really smack up job mike loved it |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Fabulous flow and wonderful sentiment ... my favorite verse was BRAVO |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Mike, do you write music? Your rhythm and wistful sense of rememberance in this piece are earthy and alluring...so lovely. First love or any love not pursued. (sigh) Rainydays |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Mike, I am sooooo fortunate to have found this amongst the pages it needs to be bumped up... A keeper for me this poem and I must compliment you on your graceNstyle of writing... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ This is just so pretty. I was so reminded of my favorite song. 'If I was not the first, just say I'll be the last. It's too much to expect, but it's not too much to ask.' (lyrics from It's Not Too Much To Ask Mary Chapin Carpenter and Joe Diffie) How very, very lovely is this one, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Mike...this is so beautiful |
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