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Fire Burning |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA 
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The sound of passion pulling through, The sound of heartbeats pounding you, Against your chest as you feel mine, The loss of all concepts of time, So lay there looking in my eyes, Stare real deep, share the fire, Of what we are about to do. Combine two worlds inside of you. [This message has been edited by spiked (edited 11-01-2000).] |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
you definitely have that passion fire burning.....I can feel the heat!!!! and I love it!!!  Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
The fires of passion consume us all. Beautiful expression here, You scorched me. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ohhhh hot...very hot...me likes  -SEA |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHh...you just took my breath away...and I dont want it back...So lay there looking in my eyes, Stare real deep, share the fire, MMMMMMMMMMMMMM |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I am so sorry to say I don't remember reading anything you've written, but this certainly won't be forgotten! Very nice. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you all so very much was a quickie but one of the best quickies I've had in a while lol. Thanks Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I loved the last line rich. sums it up perfectly. The pace was really nice, and the meter was on time. good job, with this. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Rich* The rhythm and feel of this poem was like embers being blown into a full blown inferno...excellent fire dance!! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you Serene and Butterflies Very nice to see your replies. Rich |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Boiling I'd say.... caught my attention and I have to agree with the above looking through their eyes... |
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