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Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-11-01 12:04 PM


Here, in every silence you hear a space bar,--
Venice. The only setbacks of this place are
The knots in your veins which slow the blood.
And every street here, leads to “dot dot dot,”
Which echoes like Morse Code inside your chest.
Who was the architect that designed this nest,
Where fat pigeons pluck at the stranger’s hands
Where the people swarm like unsettled ants?
Venice,-- darkness falls, but the day won’t cease
As the footsteps strike on the keyboard keys
And the blaring sounds of the violins pierce
With sharp notes, the foreigner’s harking ears.
The gondolas float like the autumn leaves,
And the night, alone, stands in water and sieves
Those lost souls, who may, slip away and drift,
Pass the city’s gates, to an obscure rift
Of the underworld, where the current’s force
Overwhelms the souls’ and directs the course.
All grows silent there, lights fade into dark.
Nostalgia carves but a question mark
On the barren souls, -- there, the story ends,
And transplants us back into present tense.



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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2000-11-01 02:31 PM


Excellent writing...my son in Calif. has a picture of Venice in his living room...James
Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

2 posted 2000-11-01 02:37 PM


Very good, I recall the first version, you bring back great memories of Venice, thank you.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

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