Open Poetry #10 |
All This For A Kiss |
AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Your hands so soft, surround my mind. The very nature of your touch is overwhelming. The sweet tormenting essence of your presence, overtakes with frightening ease, my breath. Slowly, I lift my head and meet your gaze. Softly, I slide into your stare. Did you think I wouldn't notice how you look at me? Didn't you see me watching you, too? I was so sure I could stand up to your smile. Unwillingly, I surrender to your eggresion. Wishing to succumb to your embrace instead... How could you possibly walk away unaffected? I could swear my heart was beating unusually loud, echoing through the space between us. Emotion resonating through my fingertips, and I could swear you felt it when I brushed your lips. I find myself making excuses to trace you, and you allow it, yielding tenderly to my touch. You do it, too. Although a little less, with a little more finesse. So baby, what do you say, you make the endeavor? I'd make the move, but I'm not as coordinated in love,you see. My heart is clumsy, my affection too delicate. I'm such a proud girl. I'd hate to look foolish twice! Although, I'm sure I could endure it for a taste of you. So come on baby, give it a try. Just satisfy the anticipation, and set your smile on my lips. I promise I'll return it, in even better condition. Much love all, Krissie |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The entire weave was excellent but the way you wrapped it up.... So come on baby, give it a try. Just satisfy the anticipation, and set your smile on my lips. I promise I'll return it, in even better condition. Exquisite!!! Great writing~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, thanks for the words of encouragement..This is great, a poem I can taste.. Loved it. Sandra |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Butterflies_don't_cry~ Thanks so much. I thought the ending appropriate to the moment. catalinamoon~ Anytime. Really, what flavor? lol Much love all, Krissie |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
such a great ending...perfectly done. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
AniKay83 This is very warming. can Feel the light touch of wet lips to mine. Very picturesque Rich |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Ron K. Fox~ As always, thanks! spiked~ Thanks. Are you saying you want a kiss? lol Much love all, Krissie |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Beautiful and delicate...enjoyed this -SEA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and set your smile upon my lips I promise I'll return it in even better condition." My goodness you have somehow talked me into it...anything for a kiss...James |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You must remember this A kiss is still a kiss, a sigh is just a sigh. The fundamental things apply As time goes by. And when two lovers woo They still say, "I love you." On that you can rely No matter what the future brings As time goes by. Moonlight and love songs Never out of date. Hearts full of passion Jealousy and hate. Woman needs man And man must have his mate That no one can deny. It's still the same old story A fight for love and glory A case of do or die. The world will always welcome lovers As time goes by. Oh yes, the world will always welcome lovers As time goes by. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
AniKay. . . raspberry!! This was great. . . the lengths that we'll go. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
SEA~ Thanks for reading. jmlee12345~ Pucker up, baby! Prometheus~ Thanks for the poem Jamie. Much appreciated! Sven~ LOL...thanks for the raspberry!!! Yes, the lengths we'll go, I'm out so far, I'm scared I might fall! Much love all, Krissie |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful vivid lines in the first part of this poem..images recreated for all so see and feel.....clearly... in their own perception. The latter part is very passionate and free flowing...good work!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Slowly, I lift my head and meet your gaze. Softly, I slide into your stare. ================== I could swear my heart was beating unusually loud, echoing through the space between us. Emotion resonating through my fingertips, and I could swear you felt it when I brushed your lips. I find myself making excuses to trace you, and you allow it, yielding tenderly to my touch. You do it, too. Although a little less, with a little more finesse. ================ Just satisfy the anticipation, and set your smile on my lips. I promise I'll return it, in even better condition. ============== Krissie...this is such a cool poem ... you nailed the emotions--the anticipation mixed with the insecurites.. this is exactly how it all feels... those awkward moments... and yes that last verse is WAY COOL and perfect... excellent work from your poets pen and whats most impressive is that you write WAY beyond your years...WAY beyond.. and thats way cool too. later-impress-me-gator jm |
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