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First Snow 2000 (Cinquain)
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First Snow 2000 (Cinquain) |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
snowflakes idly browsing midst sparse golden hued leaves mussed by wind’s ardent affection falling "A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside." |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WOW.....do you want to send some my way...this is lovely. You have penned much in such short verse. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very lovely ... this is a cool piece of work.. unique and creative its beauty is in its brievity and its imagery created with well chosen vocabulary very nice indeed, welcome to passions from me if i have not yet done so I look forward to more of your work take care jm |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this is beautiful. you almost make me want snow, almost lol. in all seriousness, this was lovely both in its form and in its choice of words. looking forward to reading more of your work. take care. ~amy~  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoriJaye~ This is very lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
Mark - Thank you. You're welcome to all the snow you want. I hate it and winter with a passion usually reserved for my poetry... short can be quite sweet depending upon the message wished to convey. =) Janet Marie - Thank you for the welcome and kind words. I was struck by the beauty outside my window this afternoon and a few words simply seemed to sum up the experience. =) Amy - Thank you! I hate what those lovely lazy snowflakes portend but it was a beautiful scene begging to be captured poetically. =) Marge - Thank you... =) |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
A lovely image, but truthfully I miss the beauty of a freshly fallen snow. But then again i never have to shovel it again, thank you for the wonderful image. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
How lovely this is...you captured the feeling of the first snow to perfection. I always love the first snow...now if it were only the Last snow |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty then UptoNow we've not had any snow... Don't be wishing it on us too soon here... This is nicely done, though...  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I did see a couple of your strays here today, though.. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
your words were chosen exquisitely!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lori Jaye, what a lovely cinquain. I'm shivering at the thought of it. Beautiful  Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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