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More Than I Can Give
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More Than I Can Give |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I would give anything To slow dance To this song With you. The lyrics inspire me; The melody moves my soul; The harmony gives me stability. Can't you see? I've dealt with a lot; I've made my way Through many whirlwinds. But being apart from you Is something I've never fathomed facing. I've worn hats Not many people Were willing to put on; I've weathered storms No one else has Had the courage To endure. But this is more Than I can give. Baby, won't you be quick With whatever is keeping you? This song will soon be over. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Dance away! Though I hope they return before the song is over.  <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a wonderfully sincere poem this is...and ,yes, it is very sad when the music stops....hope he gets there in time. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
WhtDove: thanks, and, so do I!! Balladeer: thanks for the compliments!! And, again, so do I!!  sp |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
an amazing read! i love it! a testament to our vulnerabilities, no matter how strong we all like to be. masterful in its simplicity. love the dance theme. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thanks for the great insight, Ethan! Glad you enjoyed! sp  |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I hate it when the music stops. It always seems to linger in my mind and I find my self humming the tune a lot. Very well said snowpants, I hope you get what you wish for. ~Sheri |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. Enjoyed your poetry. |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
SP I do hope he comes soon too. Aspiring BirdeeB |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sp A delightful poem. Enjoyed the read Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Baby won't you be quick with whatever is keeping you." Love these lines...I think this all the time...sometimes I am so impatient...wanting instant gratification...I want it now...now I tell you..NOW..James |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Irie: yes, I know what you mean. Thanks! Mike: thanks for reading! BirdeeB: thank you! Liz: glad you enjoyed! James: yes, that is the way of the world - instant gratification. I, unfortunately, am guilty of the same thing. Impatience is my biggest downfall. But, thanks for reading!! sp |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
*sigh* been in this position too many times to tell... delightfully written. Every time I jump on the forum to take a look around I try and make it a point to seek out any new posts from you. Your writing style is charming. Please, hang around awhile! ~ megan |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
thanks, megan! that means a lot to me! I'm glad you enjoyed! sp |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
QUICK!!!!!........ feed the ole jukebox another dollar and let it play once more. I do believe I hear him coming. If not he would be a fool not to be running. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
thanks, Mark! I hope you're right! sp |
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