»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #10
»
Whispering Pines - A Paradelle
| Open Poetry #10 |
|
Whispering Pines - A Paradelle |
|
|
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
|
Whispering Pines Through whispering pines the voice is heard Through whispering pines the voice is heard The wind-swept song of wintering bird The wind-swept song of wintering bird Through wintering pines, the song of bird The wind swept whispering voice is heard Through whispery vision of sparkling white Through whispery vision of sparkling white Fantasy icicles chiming at night Fantasy icicles chiming at night Vision of whispery chiming through night At fantasy icicles sparkling white Echo of winter sweeps swift through the pine Echo of winter sweeps swift through the pine A songbird’s sweet hymn of chilled season’s time A songbird’s sweet hymn of chilled season’s time A sweet songbird’s echo of chilled winter time Of the season’s hymn sweeps swift through the pine The season’s sweet echo of wintering bird Through wind-swept pines, the fantasy heard Whispering icicles chiming at night A chilled winter vision is sparkling white Whispery sweeps of song through the pine Songbird’s hymn through the swift voice of time Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-27-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm smiling... I'm smiling...  But then you knew I would..  |
||
|
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nan, I'm glad you're smiling and didn't notice my errors Marge, thanks for your e-mail. I have revised the poem and corrected it, but for some reason I am unable to submit my edit. Must be a witch's glitch Thanks liz Now I see that my edit went through after all I hope it's right now [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-27-2000).] |
||
|
Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Liz, This is warm and feels good! Excellent. Marcy "A sweet songbird’s echo of chilled winter time Of the season’s hymn sweeps swift through the pine" |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Beautiful and excellent. Sy |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fantastic, Elizabeth! I've been working on my own snow poem, hopefully will finish it soon! Corinne |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Elizabeth--this is gorgeous---this fit together and flowed so perfectly...okay, okay, maybe I like this form after all!!! You are amazing, lady!!! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
