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Just a Traveler
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Just a Traveler |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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When was it I crossed the river and found that the other side had all those slippery cliffs just like the one I came from, it was full of obstructions, thorny terrain that made the climbing treacherous, and I couldn’t go back (didn’t want to really) for this journey I found was prickly no matter which direction you took and the sky turned from darkest night, star studded at times or filled with a perfectly ripe moon, yes, and if you touched it just right it brought depth and shadow to the road. I wanted to find the perfect place to build a me in and I thought a meadow with ocean view would be my completion, to step out onto a balcony and be hit by the spray of ocean’s curl and to sleep to the sound, the heart beat of the earth, but I found that peace is transitory, it gifts you in splashes and passion crashes to your shore only when you pull strength from all those thorny voyages that cried or that danced around you in beguile showing you the dance is solitaire, really just the slippery floor and you in old and weighted boots trying to capture some sort of bliss. So forgive me if I touch you with my jaded tongue and my need to fill up, torch the condo and the file cabinet full, full of all that ache from something that I can’t even name, forgive me if I throw words around and melt when you say my name, for I am still just a traveler trying to find a home yet, knowing that I carry it around and sometimes it is just too damn heavy! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
there's an incredible amount of TRUTH here. and maybe only those of us - who've walked in such boots will recognize it - I for one found it not only true - but beautiful - and can only say: "forgive me if I touch you with my jaded tongue and my need to fill up, torch the condo and the file cabinet full, full of all that ache from something that I can’t even name" and I too find it " just too damn heavy!" Damm - you write well! ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
A magnificent piece of work with an interesting point. home is where the heart is, but i do feel sometimes that having a heart is such a cross to bear. the picture you paint of your cozy little beach house is wonderful! thanks for posting this. i enjoyed it very much. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--somehow I knew you would understand this...thanks so much for that. Ethan--I wish there had been a beach house, but it still is just a dream of mine...and not one that would make me happy...not really. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
and be hit by the spray of ocean’s curl and to sleep to the sound, the heart beat of the earth, but I found that peace is transitory, it gifts you in splashes and passion crashes to your shore only when you pull strength from all those thorny voyages that cried or that danced around you in beguile showing you the dance is solitaire, really just the slippery floor and you in old and weighted boots trying to capture some sort of bliss. What words can I find to describe the effect these words had on me? None really. I read this aloud...have you read it aloud Martie? Very important to read your own work aloud. This is truly one of your most wonderful poems..it is so tight, and is so profound. Gotta be printed I say! Hugs  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
our journeys do indeed follow the contours of life... wonderful poetry Martie. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
To touch upon the traveler in time within the reach as one would walk and meld in sync to the heartbeat of such is to relish in the tenderment of souls coliding within given force of true friendship. Set sails to horizons in the dusk and find given lines in which a new life begins with the breaching of a new dawn. Cherish the gifts of burdens laid to rest in the realms of forgiving arms as once again you are held in the securities of yesterdays words. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-27-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, dear one---no, I haven't read it aloud, but I will...thank you for reminding me of this and for your words...when you like my poetry, I am so pleased!! Mike--Yes, they do...thanks for reading, my friend. Mark--Your verse touches my heart and leaves me speechless. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'I found that peace is transitory, it gifts you in splashes' What an absolutely truthful thought ! Smiling with the image of you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--I know you have been splashed many times...thanks for being you! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So forgive me if I touch you with my jaded tongue and my need to fill up, torch the condo and the file cabinet full, full of all that ache from something that I can’t even name, forgive me if I throw words around and melt when you say my name, for I am still just a traveler trying to find a home yet, knowing that I carry it around and sometimes it is just too damn heavy! ======================= I call it the ache of again .. file it under A ... better yet..lets put it out on the curb on trash day .. if only we could charge the past rent ... make it pay for the space it takes up.. yes we aways carry it with us.. this is metaphorically amazing ... hope my read is close to how you meant it ... later my sweet gator me |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You're exhausted and weary From the thorns of the road But you find that your burden Doesn't rest with the load You can throw in a closet And forget for a while For there's lessons you need From each painful mile The person beside you Pays for other's sins Until trust owns your heart For then it begins To heal the past And allow you to grow It is then, not before, That true peace you'll know. I like this very much, Martie! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 09-27-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I don't really want to trash any of the ache...it was important in making me who I am...and I kind of like who I am... suthern--what a wonderful verse you have penned, and so true...thank you for including it here. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
travelers in midst of mornings fog weeping in tears of yesterdays bath of sunshine. Forever willing to walk paths again among orange blossoms in trails of different light as doors are opened in tomorrows shedding. Hands upon heart as scarring begins in refreshment of friends in this travelers night. Came by to make sure this one was in my library. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-27-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, the way you pen your thoughts is just INCREDIBLE! Loved this! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--thank you for coming by again and for another beautiful verse...and your library...what a special place for this to be, thanks. Maree--Hi there, so glad you let me know you liked this. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Martie, wow and double wow. What a beauty this is. Loved it girl. Juls |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
yup, you are quite good at this .. aren't you....~smile~ philip |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
juls--thanks for the double wow! Philip--It is what I do...if it pleases you then I'm glad...cause it pleases me to write. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Life is like Crossing Rivers. We like to think there is new foreign ground to cover which may be true but the same bleu sky is always over us and we're still probably wearing the same old shoes. I long awaited these tranquil fifties only to find I needed another prescription to get me around and through. Well Martie this is starting to sound like another poem but I just thought I'd add my note and say how much I liked what you wrote. [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 10-05-2000).] |
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