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Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

0 posted 2000-10-26 12:38 PM

Red light. My neck is bent trying to see if it’ll change.
Glare on the windshield makes it hard to see.
Still red. No one moving.
Car behind me belches out a bass line much to loud.
I can see heads bobbing in the rear view mirror,
Or is it the bobbing head doll on my rear window shelf?
Turn my radio obscenely loud to cover the obscenely loud radio
That wont let me hear my radio.
Radio spits out another lonely heart song. Been there, done that.
Guy on my right picking his nose. Got a winner, pal?
Always someone doing that. Ever notice?
Girl on my left painting her face, like it’s not pastel enough.
I think it’s turning yellow. No one moving.
Guy on the corner has a sign.
Says, I will work for food.
Great concept. I think it’s called getting a job.
Why is this light taking so long?
The guy next to the guy behind me with the loud music
Is arguing with the guy behind me.
Fingers are stabbing the air.
They probably can’t hear what each other are saying.
What's wrong with this light?
The guy on the corner is trying to get the attention
Of the girl with the cosmetic face.
The guy on the right just realized what he’s doing.
Looking around nervous like. Picker.
I can’t believe she let that guy in the car.
Two losers. Made for each other.
My taxes will be paying for their kids.
Everyone’s getting out of the cars behind me,
I think there’s gonna be a fight.
Now I can see my Bobbin head doll.
Horns are blasting because these guys behind me are arguing.
This looks like it’ll get rough.
The picker took off, so did the painted girl.
Oh geez, because of the morons behind me, I missed the light.
Lights red again. My necks bent over again.
What’s this guy on my left doing?

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

1 posted 2000-10-26 01:13 AM

Very interesting write, Ron! I once wrote a poem while stopped at a red light. Quite a different outcome, though. Nonetheless, this was a great write!

sp

Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

2 posted 2000-10-26 03:34 AM

LMAO...can I sit in your car?? We could laugh together ...hehehe

StarGlow
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since 2000-10-23

Posts 40

3 posted 2000-10-26 04:03 AM

This is funny!! LOL.. (whispering)with tears in my eyes, it is funny! ..lol..i think i'm the guy pickin my nose, me or Sam one. lol..

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

4 posted 2000-10-26 09:51 AM

Thanks everyone...but time does linger at a red light...must be some different kind of time zone. Ron

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

5 posted 2000-10-26 10:01 AM

you've got some great lines in here, Ron... i really loved this one:

"Guy on the corner has a sign.
Says, I will work for food.
Great concept. I think it’s called getting a job."

lol... ain't it the truth? you put me there in traffic... i'm' glad i live only 15 minutes from work... on days i have to go into the city at rush our, i end up totally nuts!! don't know how people do that every day... no wonder there's road rage, confusion, anger, stressstressstress... thanks for the read.. enjoyed this one

- all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry -

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2000-10-26 10:09 AM

RonK~ this is so funny..........I think everyone can relate to this

- SEA

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member

since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

7 posted 2000-10-26 10:27 AM

Thanks doreen (your a master or is it master-ess at words) and sea...you're both great. I enjoy reading everyone's work. I wish i could sit here all day, everyday. Ron

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

8 posted 2000-10-26 09:40 PM

Very entertaining, Ron! I enjoyed this very much!

Denise

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

9 posted 2000-10-26 10:23 PM

I couldn't let this pass me by without telling you how much I enjoyed it. Your tone comes out very well. Seems like annoyance mixed with amusement. I like it!

*Jenn*

Kitty**
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 428
Charlottesville,VA USA

10 posted 2000-10-26 11:01 PM

Ron, I saw that man picking his nose too!!
And that girl putting on that make-up...
Geeeze...she was a sight, wasn't she??
Ya know, I'll bet we were sitting at the same red light!!! I 'WAS' a little miffed
though, because you missed that light and I had to wait in that darn line for the light again!!! LOL

I LOVED this!!! Good read and a good laugh!

Kitty

AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28

Posts 388
Missing Since 1999

11 posted 2000-10-26 11:04 PM

Hilarious! Great read after a crappy day at work. Red lights never seemed so interesting.
"Picker!"
Krissie

I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary...
making you lose ur way
I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel
~Touch and Go

Alle'cram
Senior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 1816
Texas

12 posted 2000-10-26 11:09 PM

Ron, I read this one last night and thought it was hillarious, today I thought about it off and on and laughed out loud. That probably confirms my warped sense of humor.

This is a great visual of funny and it made a hazy day brighter for me. Marcy

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

13 posted 2000-10-26 11:15 PM

Glad you all enjoyed it. counted three pickers today, to pastel faced girls, and too many loud radios to mention...maybe we should have a scorecard? lol

Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

14 posted 2000-10-26 11:16 PM

Glad you all enjoyed it. counted three pickers today, two girls preetying themselves, and too many loud radios to mention...maybe we should have a scorecard? lol
P.S. imagine if we add the cell phones and newspapers?

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member

since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

15 posted 2000-10-26 11:17 PM

Glad you all enjoyed it. counted three pickers today, two girls prettying themselves, and too many loud radios to mention...maybe we should have a scorecard? lol
P.S. imagine if we add the cell phones and newspapers?

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

16 posted 2000-10-27 02:05 AM

OMG, Ron.....don't add the cellphones, please!!!! I am already splitting my sides laughing; now I have one of those headaches you get when you laugh too much

I loved it!!!!

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

17 posted 2000-10-27 04:47 AM

LMAO......this was an incrideble description....with a lot of imagery....and after all, you have seen everything while missing the green light.....Love it.

Charisma

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