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Sinking Fast
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Sinking Fast |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA 
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Sinking Fast Kelly S. McDonald You’re slipping away, so lost, and it scares me Drowning in the vast sea of unfelt life Drifting further away and deeper down I try to reach out to you but you don’t reach back You let yourself sink further and further Until you can’t breath or even call out my name Consumed by the empty depths of your heart and soul Once filled with love, now a cold and lonely place I cry for you, but you can no longer hear me My tears dry up before you realize they’re tears for you I see you slipping away, feeling helpless I slowly give up No longer able to reach you or knowing how to help you back Sadness fills my heart, and I slowly start to drift… I see what seems to be just your shell slowly float away I search inside myself for any little ounce of strength I stretch so far it hurts, reaching again, pulling any little thread Praying the one I pull doesn't unravel you I realize that I mustn’t ever give up, not ever… You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
never give up on love. you summed it up beautifully. Ron |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I felt like I could well relate.  Very powerful, Kelly.Elizabeth You cling to your ways and leave mine to me. Suum cuique. ~Elizabeth |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Kelly. . . we must never give up. . . Well done. . . and it's nice to be reading you again. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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tincan5 Junior Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 33 |
Nice poem, very heartfelt. It's really hard when you care quite deeply for someone but they don't have the "eyes" to see that. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KellSue~ Friendships and love are worth stretching for. 'I search inside myself for any little ounce of strength I stretch so far it hurts, reaching again, pulling any little thread Praying the one I pull doesn't unravel you I realize that I mustn’t ever give up, not ever…' Wonderful lines ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Very nice Kelly, a sad writing but a lovely one. Bill |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
Thank you everyone for your kind comments! I wrote this poem for a friend...a friend who seems to be slipping away and no matter what I do, I can't reach them. Thank you again!  Kelly You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things |
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