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The Night I Died
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The Night I Died |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Night I Died The night I died, I gently rose To heights where heaven’s halo glows To spaces far beyond earth’s sphere So far away and yet so near And all the stars surrounding me In heaven’s glorious sparkling sea Would come to warmly recognize The soul behind unknowing eyes The stars then took me in embrace And wrote the truth upon my face Of all that is and all that was Of every why, and its because They etched the words integrity Courage, honor, family Purpose, strength, compassion, love And faith in one true God above And thus my face revealed the truth Of character refined in youth The principles by which I’ve stood Through all the force of bad and good Contentment’s portals I had passed And saw the joy of heaven at last For there before me God had spread A lovely radiant flower bed Within it blossomed all my joys My family plus four little boys Each one a rose of sweet perfume Each with a teardrop on it’s bloom God showed to me that all I’d done Became the blessings that I won The offspring of my endless strife Became the garden of my life Four children who are brave and young Who sing the songs that I have sung They know the pain that I have known And show the courage I have shown Through the years each day I sowed The bits of nourishment to grow And as they grew, I set in place The words now etched upon my face To them the heritage I leave Are all the things that I believe They pass them now to little ones These traits unto their cherished sons The truth that stars had long concealed God with his grace to me revealed The peace I found while loved ones cried Filled up my soul, the night I died Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-25-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Elizabeth~ I'm crying......All I can think about is my Aunt Sue......I miss her so much....this poem is amazing and so beautiful....thank you for this.  -SEA |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Elizabeth, You have just sent shockwaves through my tear ducts. This has brought back the memory of the ten sons of my father besides his grave. You are an absolutely incredible poet. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Knowing that the peace will come in the end sure gives reason to celebrate rather than drown in sorrow..doesn't it? Yes, it is another one of Liz's magical poems again. Loved it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The peace I found while loved ones cried Filled up my soul the night I died." Intense words...yes nothing can hold back the tears when we lose someone we truly love...beautiful message written so perfectly...James |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Liz you have penned something incredibly beautifull Sincere and loving here, written from the heart Lovely piece hon…well done Winged ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Elizabeth, you write the most beautiful poetry! These words just flowed down the screen and carried me through til the end. The last stanza is PERFECT! Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
SEA, Thank you for your heartfelt remarks Daniel, Your comments are very kind. An incredible graveyard sight you depict Mark, Would that we all could find that peace in life. Thank you James, We're never prepared to lose a loved one. Thanks for the comments Tracie, Thanks. Love you "winged hugs" Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is OUTSTANDING. This is one of the most beautifully flowing, rhymnic poems I've read in a long, long time. It read like a classic, Elizabeth, this is one of your best!!!!!! Thank you for this one.< !signature--> "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-25-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Tara, Thank you so much, sneaking in while I was posting. Your comments mean so much Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kathleen, I am truly honored by your comments. Thank you so much. Liz |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Peace and Love - My wish for you and Tony, my friend..  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This has touched me so deeply, I'm at a loss for further words. Please just know that I love this Liz ... truly inspirational (now stop making me cry, will ya?) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
holding my breathe in, reading....while the words flowing over the screen. Can't find the right words to let you know how beautiful this poem is. thank you for sharing it with us. Charisma |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Sometimes when it's just this perfect....there are no words!!!! Oh I see.....this is how it's done!!!! Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Elizabeth, it is truly a blessing when you know you have passed on your traits into your children knowing they will pass it on because it is such a strong character that it will never let go, and by God's grace it will go from generation to generation. This was a beautiful and very tearful poem. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Such feelings stirred my soul..tugged my heart...memories lost, buried, forgotten, always there...resurfaced. Thank you. Ron |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Liz, A incredible poem. Lovely in every way, it left me feeling peace and warmth. Marcy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
great read, Liz!!...really well done... with my luck, He'll show me the compost pile ... LOL  well, i guess that would be better than the alternative of not getting in at all... still working on that one - all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry - |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elisabeth, Exquisite, Love Sy |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Liz-Splendid, the peace that lies within your heart and your portrayal of it shining through in your poem, I liked this very much. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Okay... you've gone and left me speechless. *S* But my WOW slips out on awed breath!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--This poem is you...all the beauty, wisdom, love and strength that you possess rolled into your indredible ability to write perfection.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Liz, perfection in flow and imagery and inspiration. I'm not crying. I'm not. pass me a tissue will you. Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ooooooooooooh Elizbabeth, your writing just clasps onto a heart and journeys a reader to another place and time and need I say my eyes fill with tears... Thank you for such an eloquent read Coco |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nan, Thank you for your wishes. Your thoughts are most appreciated Kit, If you liked it, I'm happy Thanks, dear Charisma, Thank you for your very sweet comments peppermint, Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it Rosebud, What we leave is on the inside. Thanks so much Ron, That fact that my poem touches you, touches me Marcy, And your comments also warm me. Tank you doreen, your going to find a bed of roses waiting for you. You'll be the celestial Poet Lauriate! Sy, thank you, Master Poet Gemini, Your comments are very much appreciated. Thanks suthern, I can't imagine you speechless, with your personality, but just one WOW warms my heart. Thank you, sweet lady Martie, You words always mean so much to me. Thank you Kethry, I consider crying a compliment, and I thank you for your tears Coco, Thanks for your kind remarks Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Elizabeth, This has to be my favorite poem you've written so far. It is so beautiful.. I can't find the wods at the moment to describe it. You are simply amazing. Thank you so much for sharing this with us ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Regardless of what passes, your heart and its love for family shows through...this will pass into the eons into which it belongs...all should be justifiably proud... truly wondrous... and my prayers continue to be with you and yours... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
after reading this - I can only say -I'm so glad you're still alive to keep writing |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Elizabeth, this is...I'm lost for words...I think I have a new favorite of yours. HUGS Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Tara, Thank you for your kind comments Sunshine, Your words always mean so much, Thank you Bill, I'm glad I'm still alive too, and I'm glad you're still alive too Denise, Thank you dear Liz |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
This is one of the most beautiful things I have ever read. Even though the entire poem is incredible I thought you might like to know which lines especially tugged at my soul... ********** The night I died, I gently rose To heights where heaven's halo glows ********** The stars then took me in embrace And wrote the truth upon my face Of all that is and all that was Of every why, and its because ********** The peace I found while loved ones cried Filled up my soul, the night I died I don't believe I have ever read words put together this well. I love it! |
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