Open Poetry #10 |
Untitled, undone |
Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Untitled, undone Like a moth to a flame I’m drawn to your soul Even with all the memories, Loving you took its toll No longer the woman I once was, Although I wish I were My friends keep asking me What I did with her? Locked away in the dark Safe from all the hurt Grimy from the mud she flung, Tear streaks in the dirt Held captive in a prison She cries out from her hell Drowning in the copper water In the wishing well Taking back every penny She ever wished upon Praying for strength to let go Instead of holding on I chronicle her mission And pen the lines in verse Knowing that she won’t undo The bindings of this curse Her love for him too strong, too great A battle that won’t be won Lost between love and hate Sick of darkness, but fears the sun The poem sits, untitled And I lay here, undone [This message has been edited by Tara Simms (edited 10-24-2000).] |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I have felt this way....and you made me feel it again..... fantastically written, the emotions just leap from the page!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Tara, you have spoken from my heart. Wow, this is so intensely sad, and lonely. I know just how you feel, I am undone too. Take care. I think in reality, we will stop loving them to some extent. And it will stop hurting. It has to. Sandra |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Tara* The pain in this was so blinding...you used that pain to create a very beautiful poem and through poetry my hope is that you will also find the healing...excellent work~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow, this is great work. I could feel every word, and those last few lines were fabulous.Take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Very well done again. I just love your style. Cheers Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Temporarily undone, she wears the title of courage beside her name of honor and respect, and with it she undoes the "undone" Very moving poem Liz |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you all for your kind words. They mean so much to me. I don't know what I'd do without the love from Passions family. Having all this support at this difficult time in my life helps more than you could know. Sven, a candle in the dark to help light my way...just what I needed. Thank you for being my friend. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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