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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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Slippery seductress with enchanting allure Persuasive romancer captivates imagination Honeyed voice echoing naturally and sure Baritone harmony witness of trumpet tongued creation Rigorous and stony for rash and prudent alike Unapologetic beauty cautions care with ones own eyes Eavesdropping feet fall prey to swift and sudden strike Oppressive cascades drown the voice of falling cries Mourning companions strangle in their own tears Wailful lamentations bemoan this great loss of love Unheeded warnings repeated for uncounted years Downfall awaits beholding waterfalls from above < !signature--> Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Jamie, this is wonderful! So full of imagery.. and I know where you got your inspiration!  |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Well written Prometheus, Waterfalls are powerful and contain meanings that need to be grasped with all the strength imaginable. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jamie, Visions of loveliness come to mind when I read this one. Beautiful!!  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW! Very impressive, and very beautiful! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Prometheus, excellent write it flowed so smoothly. I particularly liked eavesdropping feet. I knew the walls had ears but... Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each of you for taking the time to read and reply. This was written after having to repond to the same waterfall twice in three days due to falls. One of which was not a rescue, but a recovery. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Enchanting imagery Jamie...this was a soft and flowing weave. Great writing~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Amazing how something so beautiful can be so deadly. I liked the poem very much, then read what you said about the recovery. How hard that must be for you. Take care. Sandra |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hmmm Jamie, this is a wonderful poem my Dear, so good to read you again Maree p.s I havent forgotten about that email "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie...this was beautiful..and knowing the reason behind it just makes it doubly so. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Prom~ Wonderful piece to read….so very well written Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Jamie, A waterfall of wonderful phrases Very descriptive in sound, sight, and feeling A truly superb piece Liz |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
So vivid...and full of depth, too, this poem. Dangerous beauty at its finest. Lovely. =) LJ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
BDC, Catalina, Maree, Paula, Tracie,Liz and Laurie,,,,, Thanks to each of you for taking the time to read it. It is amazing how careless people are around something so dangerous,, they love the views, but just seem drawn to the edge of 400' cliffs like it was nothing. __Take a trail to the bottom and look up at the waterfall-- it is much more stunning that way!!!!..Again thanks. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You made me think of Niagra Falls..i dont know if people are still getting their thrills in barrels or not..but they are something to see..but i wish i could have seen them from the bottom as well..nicely written Jaimie ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Such a beautiful name is Victoria-- Roman Goddess of Victory...Thank you Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece is well-written and very creative Prom....in fact your rhymes flowed like a waterfall! Nathan |
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