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marriage ( going to the chapel.) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Going to the chapel and get married Raise 2.5 IDs. Take you down the aisle not of church of Baptist or Christian or any other sacred mission no my love but straight into my heart to decree my love undying for even God will fade and pass I could deny all in the face of the divine But in the face of you I am powerless to lie. Going to the chapel, and get bound, Siamese lovers at the wrist where others would topple and crawl nail and fist We dance playing out the songs of true romance. I drink of the sacred wine as you drink of mine, mouths as honey petals opening to raptures to melodies to melodious rhapsody. Sleep upon the icing Virgins once again. Kiss in whispers. No more giant distance, Waiting upon packaged commitments. Nestling in the groves of our orchard, the humble milieu, a single touch flowers Utopia. Planted in Matrimony Seeds wash the skin, culling a harvest sentimental sweet feast of ambrosia, Forever we may gorge upon the bounty of our deed. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, I love this this, it's not your usual style, but I think it is fabulous  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Agreed - not your "normal" style, but then again, one of the things I've enjoyed from you is the diversity of your writing! Sleep upon the icing Virgins once again. Kiss in whispers. Yeah - just like that! Ba-daam Brian - this one really rocks! C Read my Words. Read my Face. Don't just look at either. -C |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent ... oh I so enjoyed this! Very visual, and such wonderful sentiments ... great writing Brian! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
so my friend, are we dealing with fantasy or fiction...do tell... regardless, the write is delightful, and I enjoyed every nuance of it... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Brian, Wonderful piece my friend!! Lovely lines here . . . Take you down the aisle not of church of Baptist or Christian or any other sacred mission no my love but straight into my heart to decree my love undying for even God will fade and pass I could deny all in the face of the divine But in the face of you I am powerless to lie. Exactly as it should be. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I drink of the sacred wine as you drink of mine, mouths as honey petals opening to raptures to melodies to melodious rhapsody. Sleep upon the icing Virgins once again. Kiss in whispers. No more giant distance, Waiting upon packaged commitments. Nestling in the groves of our orchard, the humble milieu, a single touch flowers Utopia. Planted in Matrimony Seeds wash the skin, culling a harvest sentimental sweet feast of ambrosia, Forever we may gorge upon the bounty of our deed. ================= WOWOW this is awesome Bri...what way cool imagery and depth of emotion the whole poems thought processes is so awesome too...your conception of the images. >mouths as honey petals opening to raptures to melodies to melodious rhapsody.< and that verse there....STUNNING...what a gorgeous verse...gives me major poetic envy. EXCELLENT BRI ... later-did ya buy a ring gator  eve |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brain--great poem and it sure sounds like love to me...love makes great poems! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
sounds like a true commitment - will you make her 'legal'? ~G~ astounding imagery - here - really loved it! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
reminds me of an old song "going to the chapel and we're gonna get married" I'm dating myself here, but I loved this one, Brian "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love the view of life through your eyes. I grow a little bit more with every read. Thank you, brian! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Lost Dreamer, thank you for your wondeful reply. Chris, it is that simple. *wink* whne we find true love it is like starting afresh. thanks for the "really rocks" comment. Kit, thank you for your very kind words. Karilea, both "Fantasy and fiction" LOL Well lets just say it was inspired by a real life conversation, no I am still single but maybe not quite available LOL. Thanks for your wonderful reply. Lone Wolf, yes I do believe that true love does not need to be celebrated in any one church but rather in the eyes of the two people involved. Thanks for your reply. Jan, Having a huge smile reading your comments as is my ego. Thanks for your way too generous comments. Martie, I have to agree, love does help poems to flow. thanks for your wonderful reply. Wilfred, in time yes. thank you for your reply. Kathleen, you got me... I "burrowed" the line from that song... see I remember the song as well. now I feel old.. LOL thanks your very kind words. serenity, I am blushing from your very kind words... thank you for the beautiful compliment those words mean a lot to me... thank you. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Wow....I've got some images running through my mind...I loved this brian..stunning!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
When I saw this title, I said to myself, No Way is Brian running off to get married...LOL..Couldn't be.. This was very romantic, I see a special lady influencing you here. Happy times, good for you. Sandra |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
*LOL* cheeky devil...i just had to come see this one. i agree with the others....your style is great..but the sentiment is wonderful. challenge well met i must say...*wink* (and what, only 2.5? not 6? LOL...sorry, couldnt help myself) ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Brian, wonderful writing it flows. It could be the dawn of a new era for you. be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Whew boy my man...you had me thinking with the title that you were going to bite the big one.LOL....Excellent writing and love the imagery and the tender emotions in this one. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
you've expressed your love in a divine way. After all is not love an almighty power? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Cherie, don't worry of course you get to be bridesmaid..*wink* thanks for your comments. Sandra, not quite married yet... but I am slowly getting there, yes she is a very special lady.... thanks for your wonderful comments. Dawn, cheeky devil??? me, halo glowing upon my head...innocnet look on my face... ok you me better than that... I think I could only manage 2.5 I don't know about you... *WINK* Thank you for your wonderful reply, Glad that you liked the poem... I have a great muse after all.. *wink* Kethry, thank you, a new dawn yes... thanks for your wonderful reply. Mark, I am not quite ready for the big bite but in a few years I will gladly take it. THanks for your wonderful reply. Ron, I believe that it is...when it is true any obstacle can be scaled and any distance travelled. Thank you for your thoughts and reply. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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