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GreyMouser
Junior Member

since 2000-10-20

Posts 17

0 posted 2000-10-20 10:21 PM

Upon a cold and barren shore
there walked a lonely soul.
His only friends the ocean's roar
and bitter wind blow'n cold.

The biting gust touched not his skin,
though most of him laid bare.
The loss of love that might have been,
left frozen deep dispair.

Though crash of waves assailed his ears,
he heard not of their sound.
They could not drown the wail that tears
of emptiness will pound.

Sharp rocks and shells bit hard his feet,
no sandals did he wear.
He walked on to his soles' mistreat,
that hurt he paid no care.

His broken heart no pain could match,
which once with joy was filled.
Compared, all wounds were but a scratch
to love left unfulfilled.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2000-10-20 10:27 PM

so glad you decided to post mike..this is absolutely beautiful...as always..

~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-10-20 10:33 PM

Welcome to Passions, Mike! This is wonderful! You have captured perfectly the pain of love's loss. I look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome from Passions!

Denise

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

3 posted 2000-10-20 11:18 PM

I was swept away by the oceans roar and how vividly you described each line, simply beautiful welcome and I look forward to reading more. I find tranquility on the beach, it does give you a peace when all seems gloomy.

Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

4 posted 2000-10-20 11:24 PM

Welcome, this is a beautiful piece of your talent. Look forward to reading more.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

5 posted 2000-10-20 11:38 PM

very touching story of lost love..
welcome to passions, we always love having another talented member!

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2000-10-21 09:18 AM

GreyMouser~
Welcome to Passion's.
I enjoyed your verse.
Easy and lilting it swept across the page.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2000-10-21 09:21 AM

Welcome to Passions GreyMouser! What a beautiful first post ... it flowed very smoothly, and held such tender and descriptive thoughts. Hope to read more!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2000-10-21 09:31 AM

AHA..... a Greymouser with a perfect sense of rhyme and meter.... a welcome addition to our Passionate walls for sure..

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

9 posted 2000-10-21 09:37 AM

Welcome to Passions...and what a wonderful addition to our family you are going to make. Though a lonely piece it is penned in excellent quality. Loved this read much.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

10 posted 2000-10-21 11:28 AM

Welcome to passions, and with such a wonderful poem......superb.

I could find myself in it....and I will look out for more from your hand

Charisma

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2000-10-21 12:58 PM

I have visited these lonely shores many times before...perfect description...James

GreyMouser
Junior Member

since 2000-10-20

Posts 17

12 posted 2000-10-21 04:34 PM

Thank you all for your very warm welcome.
I look forward to reading from the fine
poetry submitted here.
Again, thank you
Mike *The GreyMouser*

The Lonely Stranger
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

13 posted 2000-10-21 07:02 PM

Mike,
You make quite an entrance my friend. I know that beach that you describe so well. You paint an eloquent picture

TLS

jonmcm
Member

since 2000-10-11

Posts 222
England

14 posted 2000-10-21 07:29 PM

Hi GreyMouser,

'Compared, all wounds were but a scratch
to love left unfulfilled.'

So true.
Thanks
Jon

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

15 posted 2000-10-25 02:36 PM

Mike...it took me a while to get here...but welcome to our world...this is so sad...yet so beautifully written...

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