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And Shots Rang Out
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And Shots Rang Out |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
You told me you were leaving "I dont know how long But I will surely keep in touch" As you know, how long doesnt count and promises don't meant that much "I can make a deal That ll bring in some money Its just a little drugs Just a little funny" I cried and cajoled Somehow I managed to make you Stay The next day you heard The drug deal went sour The cops came and shots rang out The friend who took your place Dead- shot six times Now tell me, are you glad That you werent there When the shots rang out |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hmm..this is a thinker.. very good msg...i hope others will read this one  hugs, dg my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Ummm...Definately a thinker . There is a lot of meaning in this poem, It is very strong and took me some time and reading atleast twice to even start to get the whole picture, you've done a great job, I think the subject is very deep and the emotions that it brings forward are different to what most poems do . I enjoyed it, the subject was so tragic . I'll probably read it again to see if I can work out some more of the feelings that it displays . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Thank you- actually a true story... Thanks again, Cuddlez Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Great poem, Cuddlez. I hope the events made your friend think twice about what he was doing. Excellent write! sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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StarGlow Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 40 |
Somebody's gotta write about it! A fact of life-hope this wasn't factual-given a second chance, needs to realize; good write. Star |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Um, Actually it WAS a true story- However the shock factor made me realize my true feelings for the guy involved. Weird how fate is all twisted and bunched, eh? Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This guy is very lucky to have you in his life...a twist of fate...yes I believe it was~ |
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